Nice progressions through the each line, correspondingly, between each stanza--especially, the last lines going from "creation" (of love), to "chance" (of a fiary tale ending), to the "ever after" (the creation and chance have culminated in a lasting love). Like this one very much.
(This is quite inconsequential, but in looking at the pairing of feet in the third and fourth lines of each stanza, each line has three feet even though "meshed" and "renowned" would appear to make those lines four feet--might they be changed to "mesh'd" and "renown'd" to denote that they should each be read as one foot and two feet respectively?--like I said, it's quite inconsequential as the two words do read as one foot less than they appear. Sorry for being so technical.) J.
Reviewed by Joseph* OneLight*® (Reader)
Reviewed on December 7, 2006
Dear Brittany,
This poem has a very nice rhythm to it. Yes, the treasure in this life is to love and be loved.
Love & Light always and in all ways,
Joseph*
Reviewed by Victor Buhagiar (Reader)
Reviewed on December 6, 2006
You say so much in so little. Perhaps that is a fault with me since I tend to be verbose. You are terse but deep. Well done for your blog and the decision you took. Victor
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on December 6, 2006
SWEET POEM FROM A SWEET LADY...
Reviewed by Miss Pandora (Reader)
Reviewed on December 6, 2006
Beautiful pen,...adeptly crafted take on the elation of new love. Bravo Brittany the Norfolk belle! Panda ;)
Early Works is an exhaustive compilation of the first decade of the poems and stories of Z.B.McClure. Included are family photos, rare personal photos, photos of 1st draft manuscripts of many of his early poems. Also some biography and memoir materia
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(This is quite inconsequential, but in looking at the pairing of feet in the third and fourth lines of each stanza, each line has three feet even though "meshed" and "renowned" would appear to make those lines four feet--might they be changed to "mesh'd" and "renown'd" to denote that they should each be read as one foot and two feet respectively?--like I said, it's quite inconsequential as the two words do read as one foot less than they appear. Sorry for being so technical.) J.
This poem has a very nice rhythm to it. Yes, the treasure in this life is to love and be loved.
Love & Light always and in all ways,
Joseph*
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