O nectar – tongued!
Sweetest of the sweet.
Don’t caress in haste
The most sublime
Verse of my life
Round and round
Exerting a fleeting effect
Of joy on my brain
With the tip
Of your tongue.
As the Earth
Moves round the Sun.
Ah! Take a turn
Away from the Sun,
And fondle it gently
As the water presses the fish.
And feel, and perceive
What is there in me.
From East to West
From North to South.
From zero to fifty
And from fifty
to the ninety degree.
Ah! But remember,
The more I burn
The sooner I die.
Candle, I am,
In your arms,
Oh! Beloved.
Thoroughly compelling, Bhuwan. I can completely relate to these sentiments and I appreciate the way you express meaning and emotion via your verses. Thank you for sharing this gift. Love and peace to you,
this is an exceptional piece of erotic verse my friend...and it has layers of meaning which allow the reader to draw their own conclusions as to whether you speak of human passion here or not.
What is clear is that the smooth flow, superb imagery and great use of methaphor makes this truly erotic and sensual.
Well done my friend.
FANTASTIC!!!!!!! Totally blown away, Bhuwan... this should be a CLASSIC and imbedded into the poetry archives of the whole world. Timeless, enduring and the quintessence of loving passion. I will reread this one many, many times. The expression is faultless and yet flows with the effortlessness of that quicksilvered fish - just ADORE that image of the water pressing the fish... could dine out on that one for weeks! Totally tactile and heart/mind massaging. TY K xx
This is so profoundly beautiful, Bhuwan, and somewhat different from your usual writings; which just goes to prove that you are, indeed, a master poet.
Take care,
Sherry
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on November 4, 2006
This touches in a wonderful way. Fantastic expressions!
The imagery is painted pefectly in these words as I see him slowly getting burned, even his warnings must be reminded! Oh Beloved, you have no idea what's waxed before you! Bhuwan, this is so bitttersweet!
Love and peace~
Kimmy
Hi Bhuwan! this is deep and romantic in one.Excellent work and the images are so vivid.
Ah! But remember,
The more I burn
The sooner I die.
Candle,Iam,
In your arms,
Oh! Beloved.
This rocks my friend!!!
Nobleman's son, Todd Ramble, returns home after years abroad and finds himself falling in love with his step-sister, who was now a grown woman. Unfortunately their love is brutally challenged by his tyrannical father.
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What is clear is that the smooth flow, superb imagery and great use of methaphor makes this truly erotic and sensual.
Well done my friend.
Ron
Carmen :-)
This is romantic creation at it's best
Exellently presented
peace be with you
William
Take care,
Sherry
Love and peace~
Kimmy
Ah! But remember,
The more I burn
The sooner I die.
Candle,Iam,
In your arms,
Oh! Beloved.
This rocks my friend!!!
Bom Bhole!
Roshan