She was beautiful,
as usual,
and I mistook in her eyes
hunger
for fire.
And somewhere in the emptiness
she still lives with me,
breathing as I breathe,
heart beating as mine beats.
And what am I supposed to do,
with me and you,
forever intertwined,
and the only desire I can find
is the never ending beckoning
of being alone again.
I don't think you'll ever fade;
not from me.
emotions pour out of a soul, raw, as you have expressed here. the heart merely expresses its emotion, and those of us who choose to feel the passion brimming underneath will enjoy and feel the pleasure of a private moment shared, and those numb to the experience can only pick it apart...
thank you for sharing your beautiful expression with us!
Hm...Perhaps it's a sought unique method of expression, however, using y for emptyness is grammatically false.
The reason being you are attaching two virtual suffixes. Pronouncedly, that form would sound the same, however.
Breathing as I breath? I surmise with the adjacent me, you either mistyped, or intentionally made sacrifice of technicality for a minor unexpected leap.
Also the matter of "And," however, that's based on personal preference ultimately.
Beckoning should merely be beckon.
Nice reading you.
Reviewed by Kevin Mc Crum (Reader)
Reviewed on September 29, 2003
Real grabber of a piece, outstanding!
That opening line, awesome.
Angela Calminetti, mother of five, New Age practitioner and gifted psychic and telepath, is proud of her family ties and does everything she can to make sure that all of her younger siblings are as happy in love and marriage as she is…whether they wa
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thank you for sharing your beautiful expression with us!
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The reason being you are attaching two virtual suffixes. Pronouncedly, that form would sound the same, however.
Breathing as I breath? I surmise with the adjacent me, you either mistyped, or intentionally made sacrifice of technicality for a minor unexpected leap.
Also the matter of "And," however, that's based on personal preference ultimately.
Beckoning should merely be beckon.
Nice reading you.
That opening line, awesome.