As is fairly said from of old,
All the five mixed up colours
Make the men’s eyes be dazzled;
All the five combined tones
Make the men’s ears be stuffed up;
All the five messed up flavours
Make the men’s mouths be sated. . .
Well, there are five things in all,
Which produce in men
The loss of their proper nature.
The first is men's fondness
For the five colours
Perceived all at once
Which disorder the eyes
And take from them
Their proper clearness of vision.
The second is men's fondness
For the five notes of music
Heard all together,
Which disorder the ears
And take from them
Their proper power of hearing.
The third is their fondness
For all the five flavours
Which deaden the mouth
And pervert its sense of taste.
The fourth is their fondness
For all the five odours
Smelt all together
Which penetrate the nostrils
And produce a feeling
Of distress all over the head.
The fifth is their preferences
And dislikes
Which unsettle the mind
And cause the nature to go
Flying about.
Moreover, those preferences
And dislikes serve but
To pile up fuel in their breasts.
These five things are all
Quite injurious obstructions
To the proper course
Of a freeman's life.
I found your form quite fanciful in its approach to the fives.
Ron
Charlie
Always,
Deborah