...Have to confess that the only thing that has changed on this one is the title!! Formerly "Symbiosis" K xx
SUNLESS PLACE
I hear sounds of the seas
in the shells of my ears
See the shine of the moon
in my eyes
Taste the sweet of the hive
on the bud of my lips
- but the pain of your heart
in my sighs
Treading each dawn so lightly
with feet that are fleet
I hasten to every fresh start
But even whilst running
I'm just so aware
my soles bleed
on the shards of your heart
Outwardly bright
but inwardly dim
I seem two persons
merged into one:
The me that I know
appears all aglow -
the other's
a place without sun
Wow dear lady, superb, I truly enjoyed this, though sad ! Gosh, were you reading my thoughts ? I too seem to be like the person described in your last stanza. But tell me, who really enjoys such feelings ? who needs these emotions ? Ah, but to be free of these, a pleasure to the soul. Well done Kate, another one of your gems.
Thats a soulmate connection....yin and yang, puzzle pieces......
that way that you can sense another person, a loved one, their mood, their tone....(I just love that lol)
You can feel your loved one on many different levels, be it a child, relative, or romantic tie.....and I think thats wonderful. My mother says our minds are like radio waves......always sending out signals.....and certain people have that special antenna.......
beautiful beautiful thoughts here...........ty pax A
The imagery dear Kate is outstanding made me breathess at times reading the depths of this one changed title or not a winner both times. Sweet Angel Kate.....HUGS LOTS LOVE.
Much too often we strive to show an outward appearance of happiness, when in reality we're hurting. I was very touched by this poem. Glad you didn't change it.
Carmen :-)
Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader)
Reviewed on September 28, 2004
I'm glad you didn't change it, it's perfectly beautiful as it is.
the imagery you use--! "...in the shells of my ears..." "...my soles bleed/on the shards of your heart..." DAMN fine writing, brilliant! o, if i could write like this...yes, WISH I'D WRITTEN THIS! BRAVA!
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That cuts you to the bone...
Love isn't meant to be like this...
Peter
Wow dear lady, superb, I truly enjoyed this, though sad ! Gosh, were you reading my thoughts ? I too seem to be like the person described in your last stanza. But tell me, who really enjoys such feelings ? who needs these emotions ? Ah, but to be free of these, a pleasure to the soul. Well done Kate, another one of your gems.
warm hugs
Elga
that way that you can sense another person, a loved one, their mood, their tone....(I just love that lol)
You can feel your loved one on many different levels, be it a child, relative, or romantic tie.....and I think thats wonderful. My mother says our minds are like radio waves......always sending out signals.....and certain people have that special antenna.......
beautiful beautiful thoughts here...........ty pax A
LP
Carmen :-)
but inwardly dim
I seem two persons
merged into one:"
Seems normal to me. Excellent poetry.
the imagery you use--! "...in the shells of my ears..." "...my soles bleed/on the shards of your heart..." DAMN fine writing, brilliant! o, if i could write like this...yes, WISH I'D WRITTEN THIS! BRAVA!
(((HUGS))) and love, karla.
hope you're seeing the Light soon! :)