A rewrite of "Swollen"; originally a creative response to short stories by Virginia Woolf
TRANSCENDENTAL
In a dream-like state,
out of the body,
into the spirit.
On the blue-green edge of reality.
Becoming weightless, I am only aware
of a subsonic pulse: a heartbeat.
I feel your presence, the palm of your hand
on top of my head. It presses me down
into subliminal depths,
your air inflating my lungs.
Your nearness impacts like mouth-to-mouth resuscitation.
Your breath swells a fullness upon my lips.
Your tongue tastes of pollen sweetness.
Your words pulse in my throat.
Swollen, I am bathed with inspiration.
The life of your thoughts flutters within me,
like a first and sudden quickening
of spawned poetic progeny:
Immaculate and mysterious...
* * * *
Bumble bees are not designed to fly;
they rise awkwardly yet somehow
manage to land with grace -
like our words with their short, inadequate
and ephemeral wings:
Poetry in motion.
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Reviewed by Michael LaSalle (Reader)
Reviewed on May 30, 2007
Kate, I love this poem on astral projection, I, as well practice
transcendental meditation, rare to read such work, I enjoyed your description, i can see why your
thoughts are brilliant, mike
Reading this has me afloat and I doubt if I'll be back to earth for awhile. This lives up to the title and then some;-)the sensuousness
achieved is stunning. bye Kate before I get carried away;-) awesome!
Kate as usual your talent shines out like a shooting star and gels the words of your poetry together. Deep yet easily digested like a fine wine ahhhhh so sweet.
Where do I begin??? JAYS, the emotion, the imagery, the POWER in your words!
I particularly love,
"...your nearness impacts like mouth to mouth recuscitation
your breath swells a fullness upon my lips
your tongue tasts of pollen sweetness
your words pulse in my throat.
swollen, i am bathed with inspiration
the life of your thoughts flutters within me...."
Each person is but a grain of sand resting beside the sea. This thought sets the tone for Jill Eisnaugle’s latest poetry collection, Beside Still Waters.
transcendental meditation, rare to read such work, I enjoyed your description, i can see why your
thoughts are brilliant, mike
Imagery par excellence; riveting poem - exceptional!!
Best wishes,
Robert
both poems are really awesome ...
TRASK
achieved is stunning. bye Kate before I get carried away;-) awesome!
etw
Hugs,
Pops
Where do I begin??? JAYS, the emotion, the imagery, the POWER in your words!
I particularly love,
"...your nearness impacts like mouth to mouth recuscitation
your breath swells a fullness upon my lips
your tongue tasts of pollen sweetness
your words pulse in my throat.
swollen, i am bathed with inspiration
the life of your thoughts flutters within me...."
DOES IT EVER. WOW!!!!! *STANDING O*
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Impressive imagery depicts emotions through "Transcendental" showing the visions of a mature soul on the delivery of its mellifluous message.
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
Stylish beaut of a poem.
As for the bee, it proves experts know more about less, and know everything about nothing.
Both gentle gems..