... Knee-jerk poem inspired by Aberjhani's awesome lines from his American Widow: Song for Coretta Scott King poem. Have just been in today and "tweaked it" ever so slightly!! LOL K xx PS Thanks for all love and prayers: much needed! :))
AMNIOTIC WATERS
“swimming bare-skinned in the waters of each others’
freedom-hungry minds” - Aberjhani
Swimming together naked in amnion,
pre-birth, post-partum –
a timeless continuum;
bathing in freedom,
wallowing in understanding,
drenched in total knowing.
In secret sacred pools
nothing can separate:
each droplet and ripple
conspires to unite,
breathed simultaneously
through billowing spirit gills;
exhaled as bubbles of soul.
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Reviews of "Amniotic Waters (Thank you Aberjhani!)"
I am deeply in love with the sea, water is a favorite element.
You take the reader to such a mysterious, yet familiar place,
back to the past and what makes our future.
I love the primeval bubble that your poem creates.
(funny, I have a poem where I used "a sacred secret", I don't know which one it was anymore :-)).
Yoni-like--->rock formations cave worship, crawling through the aperture and crawl back out again in an imitiation of divine rebirth, the entry and return from the celestial womb. This is so resonant of the womb-grave of the Neolithic burial mound at Byrn Celli Ddu, Wales. It also is worthy crossover of a sexuality hymn, in Sumerian vernacular, the cuneiform for "woman" interpreted as a pubic triangle. Including the analogy between the reproductive body of the female and the reproductive body of earth to accomodate fresh knowledge of the seasons, the yearly, cyclical process of sowing and harvesting crops, a place of new life, also a cultural perogative of spawning new children. Lastly the Amniotic Waters forming the Ocean from her blood. A journey into gestation, you nourish us with a fertile mind, Kate.
For a "rough" draft, this is pretty darn good! I'd love to see the finished product, but for a first attempt, this is awesome! You rock, girl! BRAVA!!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in America, Karen Lynn in Texas. :D
Prayers still with your mum and you; keep my daddy in yours. He has pneumonia. He was supposed to have his surgery yesterday, but docs found mild pneumonia in his lungs, so they postponed surgery. They will do it when the pneumonia is gone. They are giving him i.v. antibiotics and probably oxygen. Will keep you up to date; stay "tooned"~ :)
I'm in love with your first draft, Kate, and particularly taken by stanza 2. Aberjhani's poem was one incredible piece and I can't imagine a more beautiful response. Dawn
A rough draft???? Surely you jest, Kate!! This is fabulous as is _Aberjhani's beautiful poem. If _A is not flattered by such a skilled tributive write, I would be more than surprised. Two great authors, you both are and perhaps you might consider a collaboration, if, indeed, both of you do those. Anyway...your work here is nothing short of wonderful, Kate...I have no idea how to improve upon perfection.
Take care,
Sherry
As the Kings knew, freedom is in language and haveiong the courage to use it effectively. Today, we honor each of them, again, closing a major chapter in the freedom gaining march of mankind. The contimeporary struggle allows us to realize how far we've come since 90% of earth's inhabitants were slaves. Kate, your effective words open new understnding of the ongoing drive of human beings to be TOTALLY FREE ! ! ...We're almost there.....-Bill
I love this sweet Kate and feel like I'd like to jump right in and test the waters with you. I do not know anything about total knowing I only believe knowing comes from doing and living which in a way is like swimming through life as you say.
Felix
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on February 7, 2006
The poetic form and language is great.
But, for an idiot like me I need someone to translate.
You have added your own unique style and substance to this adaption of Aberjhani's work Kate !
Given the nature and content of your own labour, I reckon it is as good as it gets !
Peter
Reviewed by Elizabeth Taylor (Reader)
Reviewed on February 7, 2006
Beautifully done, Kate. And the touch is passed on.
I read these lines and felt tears slipping down the faces of the souls of MLK and Coretta Scott-King. No thanks are due to me for these profoundly exquisite lines. It's because of their courage and loving vision of and for humanity that my pen sings as loudly (even if sometimes out of tune) and freely (even if to the point of embarrassing others) as it does. Thank you Extraordinary Poet for the light you continue to gather and shine for us all.
Aberjhani
Each person is but a grain of sand resting beside the sea. This thought sets the tone for Jill Eisnaugle’s latest poetry collection, Beside Still Waters.
Contraband Marriage, traveling along the hemline of loving after incarceration, is a love story written in lyric and free form, set in reality with a different ever after.
Perhaps "..Quiet Storm" will help rekindle old flames buried and long forgotten or express the love so deeply locked inside of your soul longing to be released.
Regardless of where you may be found in love this beautiful masterpiece can be
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You take the reader to such a mysterious, yet familiar place,
back to the past and what makes our future.
I love the primeval bubble that your poem creates.
(funny, I have a poem where I used "a sacred secret", I don't know which one it was anymore :-)).
I really loved this piece of poetry.
Axilea
Carmen
Paul;-)
Sage
Love Tinka
bathing in freedom,
wallowing in understanding,
drenched in total knowing.
In secret sacred pools
nothing can separate:
each droplet and ripple
conspire to unite,
deeply moving poetry,
Reindeer
For a "rough" draft, this is pretty darn good! I'd love to see the finished product, but for a first attempt, this is awesome! You rock, girl! BRAVA!!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in America, Karen Lynn in Texas. :D
Prayers still with your mum and you; keep my daddy in yours. He has pneumonia. He was supposed to have his surgery yesterday, but docs found mild pneumonia in his lungs, so they postponed surgery. They will do it when the pneumonia is gone. They are giving him i.v. antibiotics and probably oxygen. Will keep you up to date; stay "tooned"~ :)
Eileen^
On a literary note, boy, that Aberjhani is some kind of muse. We should write a book about him. :-)~~Nordette
Take care,
Sherry
Felix
But, for an idiot like me I need someone to translate.
Be well,
Kathy
Given the nature and content of your own labour, I reckon it is as good as it gets !
Peter
Aberjhani
For a "first draft," this is GORGEOUS!
Although I love the entire write, the second stanza,
"...bathing in freedom;
wallowing in understanding,
drenched in total knowing. ..." <-----------deeeeeeeeeep, thought provoking excellence!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.