... The last in my short burst of prose for now, I think! :)) K xx
STREET CHILD
“Owwwwwwwwww!”
She had been hunched under her tatty blanket, sitting cross-legged behind a begging bowl and “Hungry” sign for hours, and had only leant back for a second before he trod on her outstretched fingers. “Sorry, sorry!” he flustered, stooping down and coming close to inspect the damage. Too late: she was already sucking hard on her throbbing digits to numb the pain.
But it was good. He would have walked right past her otherwise and would never have had the opportunity to gaze into the most piercing eye-light he had ever seen, shrouded beneath heavy lids and long strands of tousled dark hair. Feeling he couldn’t now just walk on by, he sat down on the street next to her and took in the view that she had become used to: filthy wheel arches of passing traffic; flapping suit-trousers marching to and fro six inches in front of her and sqeaking trainers, trailing odours of gum, sweat and dirt. He looked sideways at her face and noticed the spatters from all the foul water kicked up by incognisant pedestrians.
As he got her talking, it became clear that she had plenty of experience in this displaced way of life. Her skin showed many traces of use and abuse. But, beyond the taint of her unwashed clothes, she smelt fresh somehow; and it was as if warm oil streamed from her inner being. Her lack of bitterness and acute understanding of ALL the world’s ills amazed him for one so young.
Hours seemed to roll on by as they chatted about all things pertaining to life and death, its meaning and purpose, totally invisible to the rush of the crowd. He found himself wanting to save this girl, to become her hero – at one point, leaping to his feet and assuming Superman poses to encourage her easy laughter and sensitive responses. When he sat down beside her again, he had a ripped red carrier bag draped round his shoulders like a cape.
It was already dark when they noticed that they were starting to shiver and needed food. Suddenly, she reached deep into her jeans pocket, concealed beneath the rug, and withdrew a crumpled circle of light. Unfolding it, she smoothed it back into shape and stuck it on her crown, pulling it into place as if it were a rain hat. Throwing off her covering for the very first time, she revealed two tiny stubs of wings, no bigger than fiddlers' elbows. The ragged plumage was still a grubby grey, but a few sleek flight feathers had already emerged.
She stood up, rubbed her aching ass and flexed her long legs after all those hours of sitting. Smiling broadly, she jerked her head and flicked her eyes skywards. “Sooooo…” she said, “You wanna stay at my place tonight?”
The ending was a total delightful surprise!
The entire story was fascinating, one that kept my interest all the way, albeit it was short. I'd like to read more of your work soon.
Kate this is by far my favorite from you -- it's enchanting. We never know who the street people might really be. Again, a stunning and enchanting -- extremely well-written, piece.
Love,
CJ
Very nice heart touching story about the beauty lying beyond the ordinary. It is people like you that will keep literature alive. I'm glad I got to read this and have a merry christmas and gods blessings to you and your writing endevours.
Charles D. O'Connor III "I am Providence"- H.P. Lovecraft.
Terrific as usual!
I love your heart Kate!
Everything you said and how you said this sad tale
Touched my heart deeply Sweet Kate!
A Keeper!
Off to the VAult it goessssss!
WArm HuGs,Sheeexoox
loved all the details in this piece...great ending
Reviewed by Steve Scrivens (Reader)
Reviewed on December 4, 2006
Hi Kate...enjoyed reading this...left me wanting more!
Is there more?...let me know please.
I wrote a piece recently provoked by an experience I had involving a person who was homeless in Picadilly Circus London. Having faced eviction and potential homelessness myself recently it's a subject that is close to my thoughts...there but for the Grace of God and a very good friend go I.......
I think Joseph captured my sentiment perfectly Kate..."angels in dis guise". Captivating write and a brilliant character study. You capture all the senses...especially the emotive "feel".
Love, Taylor
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on December 4, 2006
That Francis of Assisi film is brillo'
Is rusty taking the p***.
Kewl story Angel KaKe Kate, i'm glad i left it for today, one can visualise the whole scene, things like this that are rare give the greatest pleasure...
GIT GOT GET PULISHING
Reviewed by J M (Reader)
Reviewed on December 3, 2006
Kate-This is so awesome the wording , expressions, the whole dramatic secene in this story poem and the worth in the end excellent. For we never know whom we serve if they be an angel...........Wonderful a blessing to read... {hugs}}}Joselyn
Reviewed by Victor Buhagiar (Reader)
Reviewed on December 3, 2006
Tonight on the Italian TV we hope to watch the story of Francis of Assisi, the one who alsmost ignored a leper who in reality was Jesus Christ. This story reminds me of such instances. Another is that of Martin of Tours, who as a Roman soldier gave half hhis cloak to a poor man again Jesus in disguise. Your story is excellently written. It shows how the homeless live. I have read and written about them. But they are not all angels thought they deserve to be treated as such. Keep these stories going. They have much to impart. Victor
This is fabulous sweet Kate and it proves once again the inner love your muse pours forth from your heart. It is a story in itself but also a lesson. A lesson on acceptance, understanding and the ability to look past outward appearances. I love it.
Excellent descriptions about the
hazard of homelessness in the USA
today. BRAVA!
Becca
Reviewed by Joseph* OneLight*® (Reader)
Reviewed on December 3, 2006
Dear Kate,
Makes me wonder ... just how many of these "street children" are really angels in disguise? If we look with our hearts, I believe we'll see their beautiful wings.
Oh, dear Kate... my face must look like a rainbow, now, such was the blend of tears and radiant smiles this marvel of a writing elicited... and which then overflowed into my soul! My deep reverence before such a masterful work of literary and spiritual art - you are beautiful! Thank you for the privilege of this inspired, inspiring reading!
Love and {{{{{{{{{hugs}}}}}}}}}}}
Alexandra*
What an ending, Kate! And it really proves the point that the most interesting beings are often the most overlooked and ignored - both human and nonhuman!
This touches all my senses, appeals to all my emotions and it's a keeper. Your wordsmith sweet song is a master pen. Send it out...get it published everywgere. It points to miracles and that everyone has spirit and sometimes we walk on by the best ones.
Love,
Susan
The captivating music of birds and the enchanting beauty of roses have, each in their own right, inspired people around the world for as long as anyone can remember. How the two combine with the challenges faced by a struggling writer in Georgia to c
The captivating music of birds and the enchanting beauty of roses have, each in their own right, inspired people around the world for as long as anyone can remember. How the two combine with the challenges faced by a struggling writer in Georgia to c
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Fabulous write Kate~
I enjoyed it all the way through!
Love and Peace~
Kimmy~
Regis
The entire story was fascinating, one that kept my interest all the way, albeit it was short. I'd like to read more of your work soon.
Connie
Love,
CJ
Charles D. O'Connor III "I am Providence"- H.P. Lovecraft.
I love your heart Kate!
Everything you said and how you said this sad tale
Touched my heart deeply Sweet Kate!
A Keeper!
Off to the VAult it goessssss!
WArm HuGs,Sheeexoox
TD
Is there more?...let me know please.
I wrote a piece recently provoked by an experience I had involving a person who was homeless in Picadilly Circus London. Having faced eviction and potential homelessness myself recently it's a subject that is close to my thoughts...there but for the Grace of God and a very good friend go I.......
Brett
Love Tinka
peace and love, Carole
Love, Taylor
Is rusty taking the p***.
Kewl story Angel KaKe Kate, i'm glad i left it for today, one can visualise the whole scene, things like this that are rare give the greatest pleasure...
GIT GOT GET PULISHING
Fee (Pops)
hazard of homelessness in the USA
today. BRAVA!
Becca
Makes me wonder ... just how many of these "street children" are really angels in disguise? If we look with our hearts, I believe we'll see their beautiful wings.
Love & Light always and in all ways,
Joseph*
Susan
Love and {{{{{{{{{hugs}}}}}}}}}}}
Alexandra*
Love,
Susan
Rusty
This is enchanting! I really liked this one!!!
Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)