... On a bit of a New York roll at the mo... :)) K xx
CORTLANDT STREET
The swaying of the slowing train
makes my mind and belly lurch as,
through serpentine dark,
an ill-lit gloom approaches.
Pace halts to a funereal shudder,
the “badumm” of the rails a sullen mantra
louder with the slackening speed.
We enter the vagueness of an eery
disused station, its wall tiles barely white
enough to pierce the shroud of dust;
charred timbers like spent matchsticks
litter long-abandoned platforms;
half-opened boxes, girders stockpiled
roundabout all lacking sense of purpose.
The air thick with silence.
I picture the muscular pride of cranes
and clout of heavy construction
loudly rending skies above,
pledging radiant renewal;
but what’s here below’s cadaverous,
laid out in shock, still breathing
smoke and choking back
the suddenness of death,
mummifying the unthinkable.
The boy opposite’s unflinching,
ears plugged with an indifferent beat
as we pick up speed and edge towards
new darknesses ahead.
I can hear the clackerty clack throughout... I admire how you see beauty in everything, be it concrete and steel of the countryside...
Again I'll say, I hated Man H for those ugly sky blocking nightmare buildings... yet duchess county is sooooo beautiful... I love Roosevelts place, and where Churchill stayed, and places where i could feel real world saving history made from two great men...
Yet this reads like a joyful Bob the Builder, and a lass who sees beauty in a dustbin.... 9/11 is bad and sad, yet don't forget all the IRA AND WWII places that are far worse, but as brits we just forget and carry on... we never hear about 7/7 every year and on here you'll see a 9/11 but look for a 7/7, where the yank evangelicals wished over a million of us were killed...
Kate you need taking in hand my lass.... 9/11 did not just happen out of the blue... yet you write sublimely.....
Blinder Mizz MP. In the first stanza I would have said Swindon station ;-)...However, the dark brooding and superbly descriptive deftness of your pen has brought to life a positive deluge of mixed emotion and picture perfect imagery of your visit to NY...Damn Good pen Mizz MP.
You do yourself proud with this piece, as you have taken me home once again, but did you know there are also farmlands and dairy farms, mountains and oceans as far as the eyes can see?? Sleepy Hollow, Fort Ticonderoga and Old working farms from the 1600's and 1700's? So much more to New York than just Manhattan Island. A place of mystery and amazement, a place where people from all around the world congregate. This piece rings truth with all its sounds and smells, sights and beliefs.....
No one see what a newomer picks up, and in this work you've proven the statement. So much of the USA is either beautiful or direty, with little inbetween. Enter the new arrival and from keen thoughts and penmanship, we see the degraded city for what it is in so many ways. When you soar, baby, you're up there, but when you dig, there is no bottom! This is excellent perception, personified. With envy... almost, - Bill
I had the same feeling as Eileen...a 9/11 flash...I don't know the city well enough to know if the Cortlandt subway is in that area, but its energy comes through this write.
Kate no one paints a cityscape like you! I'm a country girl, New York scares me to death but it obviously makes you feel alive and filled with poetry! Impressive write.
Your poem reminded me a little of the movie "Ghost" Especially the subway scene where Patrick Swayzee learns how to move objects. There are still so many of these quaint but eerie stops below the city streets of Boston, New York and so many others i'd imagine. Thanks for the ride. Peace, Love and Blessings Always, Paul.
...subterranean thoughts...visuals to feel the rhythm...of iron squeals upon turns...giving light within a dark tunnel...from this poets pen.
wonderful memories you have given me Kate...
John
The imagery reminds me of many a train ride, the old stations, the errieness of the train's sounds along the rails, and the expectation as I would get closer to my destination. An incredible ride!
Very animated words that stroke the paper and creat a mural of incredible character. This is a handsome piece of poetry.
Blessings and love,
Susan
Reviewed by Chantilly Lace (Reader)
Reviewed on February 10, 2008
Well done,enjoyed sweet lady..take care...Hugssss
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
Reviewed on February 10, 2008
Your trip has unleased some mighty poetry from you, Kate, and I, for one am loving it . . . You have the voice somewhat of Sandberg, especially when you talk about the "muscular pride of cranes / and clout of heavy construction," and other descriptive lines . . . You have found renewed self-inspiration here . . . Wonderful . . .
pax A
Again I'll say, I hated Man H for those ugly sky blocking nightmare buildings... yet duchess county is sooooo beautiful... I love Roosevelts place, and where Churchill stayed, and places where i could feel real world saving history made from two great men...
Yet this reads like a joyful Bob the Builder, and a lass who sees beauty in a dustbin.... 9/11 is bad and sad, yet don't forget all the IRA AND WWII places that are far worse, but as brits we just forget and carry on... we never hear about 7/7 every year and on here you'll see a 9/11 but look for a 7/7, where the yank evangelicals wished over a million of us were killed...
Kate you need taking in hand my lass.... 9/11 did not just happen out of the blue... yet you write sublimely.....
Regis
Lt. Cmdr Bond Mrs
Aka that Northern softy Paul;-)
Be always safe,
Karen
the haunting of it. Brava Kate!
Your poem reminded me a little of the movie "Ghost" Especially the subway scene where Patrick Swayzee learns how to move objects. There are still so many of these quaint but eerie stops below the city streets of Boston, New York and so many others i'd imagine. Thanks for the ride. Peace, Love and Blessings Always, Paul.
your poem conjures up anguished memories,with your vivid imagery
et
wonderful memories you have given me Kate...
John
God bless you. Kathy
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Blessings and love,
Susan
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in America, Karen Lynn in Texas. :D