Kate, you reveal submission to a love that was not to be, to a life long aching for him -- tender and sad -- expertly written my friend -- peace and love -- Jon Michael
EXCELLENT! YOUR PHRASES 'HAUNT' AND THE IMAGERY IN THIS WRITE IS VIVIDLY CLEAR, PAINTING A CLEAR PICTURE OF THE PAIN....IN COMING FACE TO FACE WITH REALITY. THANKS FOR SHARING...SO ENJOYED.
There is absolutely nothing missing in this poem, Kate. In just a
few beautifully crafted lines, it covers a lifetime of love and loss and pain. My, but you write so well. -gene.
Missing, I thought ahead, and thought of memories maybe to be forgotten, (feeling sad for what you are somewhat yearning maybe) Another of your Great expressive perceptions Kate!
Love this truth feeling poem!
WRITE ON!
Blessings and Peace, Purple_Passions, SHEExooo
Sometimes it is the not belonging/possessing that hurts the most... that knowledge that in essence you don't have a right to mourn the absence of someone or something because the feelings you have were never returned. Maybe all of that doesn't make any sense... :~)
Such painful emotions in so few words...how beautifully expressed, Kate. I understand these feelings: Cotton-candy, once sweet, now sticks to the palate; just a button does not allow closure; living things lost do not exclude death. We feel, we give, we share, but never allowed possession...so many expressions of our life's journey...and so well penned, dear friend.
Blessings and Love - Micke
Oh my Kate,,,stunning poetry...you blow my mind! This is so one I can relate to...ty for sharing such a gift,,I open mine with gratitude!
Love,
Christine
Kate, this is so short, but it reads like a novel...one that would be difficult to put down. It has me wondering why, how and when. Sad, yet truly beautiful.
To possess one's soul is only done when you find that true soul mate, they become so much a part of you that it isn't possession but residence. Your soul lives inside of his soul. Never can that be broken. Even when soul mates depart from each other, pieces still remain for eternity. That is why we search in every lifetime to find those missing pieces to once again reside inside of that sanctity of our soul mate. Wow, deeply responding to this poem, not sure why but these words are just flowing from me. You inspired me, Kate, that's a good thing..lol
Much peace, love, and light,
Amber "V"
Kate,
The structure matters so much here, the eliminations (as Axilea refers to) in the first three stanza half and the focus on what is in the second three-part half; but on top of that the parts are more than a sum, they are an entire feeling and response...loss, pain and trying to cope.
It's interesting to begin like this, by eliminating the small detail, the more obvious, the sweet memory. "It" all seems to be concentrated in the loss and in the absence.
Oh Kate this one is so painfully sweet that it aches for a kind word or a soft touch. When we are in love with someone we find special comfort in such simple things as a favorite picture, a ticket stub from a movie shared, or yes even a button or article of clothing. Love is a special blessing whether it be for a week, a month or forever it should be treasured and remembered always and you captured that will in this poem my dear Kate/well done.
hugs
Pops
This is my personal inspirational book of poetry. It contains many poems written for family, friends, and relevant life situations. Hopefully you will find some that will encourage and inpsire you in whatever arena you are found in your circle of l
A further collection of poems, many from years in the Middle East, but also the California San Francisco and Central Coast areas (Santa Cruz, Carmel, Big Sur, Berkeley, etc.).
If you tend to believe romantic, passionate, masculine poetry is a thing of past eras, read "She Intrigues Me," and be swept away in the beautiful craft of a contemporary poet of love.
Sheila
few beautifully crafted lines, it covers a lifetime of love and loss and pain. My, but you write so well. -gene.
Love this truth feeling poem!
WRITE ON!
Blessings and Peace, Purple_Passions, SHEExooo
Cryssa
Newfie Hugs, Rose
The Buzzard
Blessings and Love - Micke
Carole~
Love,
Christine
Georg
Much peace, love, and light,
Amber "V"
good one, Kate ...
The structure matters so much here, the eliminations (as Axilea refers to) in the first three stanza half and the focus on what is in the second three-part half; but on top of that the parts are more than a sum, they are an entire feeling and response...loss, pain and trying to cope.
John
Axilea
Jerry
No point in paining yourself over and over again
Jimmy
hugs
Pops
debs
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in America, Karen Lynn in Texas. :(