E.W. Richardson introduced us to a new haiku form, 5 lines x 5 sillabes, 7x7 and 5x5, and I suggest that we call the new haiku form for a Richaiku
Wandering Man (richaiku)
Wandering on sands
erasing winds blow
as we go, our tracks;
the ghost passed there
with nobody’s heart.
Who are you, wandering man?
searching the truth among the
pieces of all spoken lies…
forty tireless desert years
looking for an honest one
that hadn’t sold his soul for the
thirty pieces and three nails.
Wandering on sands,
leaving paradise
and no looking back,
erasing winds blow
as you go, your tracks.
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Reviews of "Wandering Man (E.W. Richardson haiku)"
Georg...first let me thank you for your comments...richaiku you have named it, so I will keep that title....the concept of that form came from one of my experiments, involving the haiku/senrye/tanka family, one of my favorite family of form verse.
You clearly work in this form well, as this wonderful and sage write shows. Thank you again my friend and keep up the good work.
Wonderful write, filled with the expressions of life's why's. One to ponder over.....
Be safe,
Karen
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on October 6, 2007
Great writes, one n all, full of expression.... and it's rhyming Haiku, so best call it RIKU...Haiku is a pain in the where the sun don't shine...Hmmmm sounds like England...lol
I'm not sure if this is Haiku, but Richardku it definitely is!...and this is so creative and so well-written!!! I love the picture that was presented with this poem as well. The poem fits the picture so well. Enjoyed both immensely!!!
...perhaps some have lost their beliefs in this desert...within the winds erasures...but the grains of sands speak to one another...when no one is around...seeking those who know the truths held.
John
Reviewed by Chantilly Lace (Reader)
Reviewed on October 6, 2007
Excellent writing sweet man,have a great day...Hugss
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Peace, Love, and Light,
Amber "V"
You clearly work in this form well, as this wonderful and sage write shows. Thank you again my friend and keep up the good work.
you worked this neoteric genre quite nicely ...
Be safe,
Karen
I'm not sure if this is Haiku, but Richardku it definitely is!...and this is so creative and so well-written!!! I love the picture that was presented with this poem as well. The poem fits the picture so well. Enjoyed both immensely!!!
Sandie May Angel :o)
Fee
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
John
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D
Excellent!
Walt
Blessings,
Joyce B.