Loud so loud
escape I must
I care not for game seven
for Sac vs. Dal
we cares? but there it is
and it is in my ears
resounding the fury
louder and louder
stomping feet surround sound
screaming people in my living room
and I put my hands to my ears
but still hear
SCORE
and all I can think is
I’d rather hear
the roar
of the sea just now
would rather
be
walking the shore
would rather
be
far from this place
but then where would I go
what would I do
if not here
then
where
I don’t know if the loud of the game
matches
the loud of my heart
loud so loud
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Reviewed on May 18, 2003
I would also rather be watching the ocean. Well written.
Auch!! Lets go for a walkies.....remember that dog trainer??....walkies, sit, stay...now lets go walkies on my beach,,,,,,with a tall glass of orange juice and something real strong inside.....and we forget about this world and kids for one day.....okay!!!
Love you!!
Tinka
Josefina,
This is a well penned piece, some very good lines, Yet mere lines, as we so casually, and irreverently do refer to them, can turn the very heart of mankind. Hmm, what power indeed, do we wield in ink..
Rodney Evan Bohen
I don’t know if the loud of the game
matches
the loud of my heart
loud so loud
Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson (Reader)
Reviewed on May 17, 2003
Walking does the mind good...
Reviewed by Elizabeth Taylor (Reader)
Reviewed on May 17, 2003
"...I’d rather hear
the roar
of the sea just now
would rather
be
walking the shore..."
Me too ! Well done.
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on May 17, 2003
LOL Janet...very good yet melanchonic poem, know this feeling so well
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BAM!! right to the point...
"...i'd rather hear
the roar
of the sea just now
would rather
be
walking the shore..."
when do you wanna go?? sounds heavenly...
well done, one of your best!
(((((HUGS))))) and love,
karla. :)
Love you!!
Tinka
This is a well penned piece, some very good lines, Yet mere lines, as we so casually, and irreverently do refer to them, can turn the very heart of mankind. Hmm, what power indeed, do we wield in ink..
Rodney Evan Bohen
I don’t know if the loud of the game
matches
the loud of my heart
loud so loud
the roar
of the sea just now
would rather
be
walking the shore..."
Me too ! Well done.
JC xoxoxoxo