Lashes meet
in the candlelight,

Your poetry is so captivating. I can really see the picture you pain. Skin crying...amazing.

Anytime one sees wings...it is a good thing.
Wonderful words.
Carolhawks

Sensuous, soft...beautiful.

I could rave... you brilliant, brilliant girl! 1: that shape-- awesome! right off the bat, I saw a few images: a wavering top with a relatively straight bottom-half, and I thought... hmmmmm candle? But wait... could be a person kneeling... 2: so I read, and was thinking "Big Bang?" and the poem totally works with that theory until you get to the second half. 3: So I change my second-guessing tactics, and just read... 4: liquid imagery so mind-popping wonderful... 5: I see pale skin of the aged, a rocking chair, and a grandaughter (so much love...) and then 6: I think, you know (my didactic mind getting control of me again) if she were to change that "chair" to foot stool, then my first reading would totally work again... candles, kneeling, devotion.... and ....subtle, gentle, feminine movements, dripping wax --"skin smiles" I love it! It all works beautifully. :) --Charlie

Two whose souls are committed to each other and all the joy it brings to shed the light of love...

Be always safe,
Karen

Goose pimple bones comes to mind, a line that goes hand in hand with the sensation fuelling the smile of one's skin.

Regards
David

Nice thougths Axilea...the pivotal moment sends the mind into a variety of imagination...along with that immediate eternity...your expression od two combined into a specialty of smiles and skin, the very essence of a candlelite event...

nice poem...

Art Sun...

Axilea - Tender, wise poem of flesh and spirit. Especially liked the closing lines:

and skin cries
while quietly you smile
from your chair
and I see wings
instead of wheels,
my skin smiles...
your chair, my cradle.

-David

Sensually enticing words in a dreamy otherworld like state as two lovers sated on each others hearts dream. Well done Axilea
hugs
Fee

This is a good poem,you are a talented writer.keep up the good work,take care

Edwin

this is good i really like it

enjoyed the read

This is so intricate in its imagery and sublime metaphor; and I love the form. -- Jeff

The surface images are excellent in themselves and can stand alone; what lies beneath resonates subtly, a lasting vibration..."like the mystery elucidated then graciously hushed..."
Yes, wings indeed instead of wheels.
John

and I see wings
instead of wheels,

Lovely sentiments are expressed within your verses, Axilea. Thank you for sharing this gift. Love and best wishes,

Regis

nicely written axilea. keep writing

Beautiful write!!!

Sandie Angel :o)

Oh, I love this one, multi-layered beauty! The person is disabled? Don't see it, with the wings ... well done, Axilea.

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.

Excellent write. I applaud you poet.