Seems to me you've done a pretty good job of expressing/showing scattered thoughts. That's just the way the come and go.
"feathered fears caught on a wing," < love that line. :-)
Dear readers, this is my third book of poems, and inside are a special collection of what have turned out to be not only MY personal favorites, but also the favorites of many of YOU. Some of these have never been available in print before...
"feathered fears caught on a wing," < love that line. :-)
Carmen
Erica~~