Swift current ripples the surface
of tannic black waters
the Seminoles call the Ocklawaha River
a brew of swamp and wetland decay
snowy egrets strut the banks
with a weary eye always
on sunning gator's movement
coots, black as tar, paddle and maneuver
as bass break the surface
gulping oxygen and flies
Spanish moss drizzles in lacy patterns
from live oaks swaying in humid air
large,fat mosquitoes hover and drone
in the pressing heat
as wigglers slither, ruling the palmettos
at the hog valley store
the locals swagger in
leaving the sugar sand parking lot
in crowded disarray
with pick up trucks and dirt bikes
outsiders ain't welcome
in the good ole boy's hangout
where greasy burgers and longnecks
feel at home
the pool table smells like cheap booze
and occasional wacky weed
what the ole boys call easy livin
is outside the local law
seedy ventures where Smith & Wesson
and shady clientele venture into
poaching and distilling deep in the forest
swamp buggies and air boats roar
providing transportation for most
upon the store walls, trophies
the skin of "Old Joe", six plus feet
of rattler stretched out
fat as a small pig
belly up boys and spin a yarn or two
while you down a brew
at the hog valley general store
life takes on its own view
I found myself entranced in your places of yesteryear!
This is a great imagery-filled expressive poem!
Glad I didn't miss this and Jon, I appreciate the reminders I needed!
WRITE ON!
Warmest of Blessings, Love and Light, Warrior Purple Lady SHEEXoooo
Such a smooth woven piece, a pleasure to read!
Love,
Eileen
Love,
Becca~
Ron
Regis
The details leap from the page, so accurate and powerful and real in this particular world removed in so many ways from the conventional and yet ordinary and special in its uniqueness. Gene makes a good point, it has all the right ingredients for a fine novel but the two of you have just written it and we are the richer for it. I love this.
John
keep up the duo...great blend!
Christine
Sandie Angel :o)
on the other hand, I think you've said it all in these great
lines. Thanks Jon and Carole for this beautiful collaboration.
I'm happy for you. -gene.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.