Betrayed. (A work of fiction). (poem) by Kay P M- Devenish on AuthorsDen

Reviewed by Michelle Kidwell Power In The Pen

Reviewed on October 28, 2003

Outstanding piece, but you always write excellent verse;
God Bless
~Michelle~
And ty for your kind message

Reviewed on October 28, 2003

This was just outstanding Kay!!

Love Tinka

Reviewed on October 27, 2003

Hi Patricia,Good point,but here in Australia we have a name (nick name) for sex,it's called doing the deed...it's inuendo but everyone here knows what it means,we all also call cheating 'doing the dirty' ...I guess in other countries they have more refined ways to say sex or cheating,I guess you'd have to be an Aussie to know,thanks for the comment, the deed was not a hug,it was a '....',you know what!
yeh...'a deed!
God luv ya...you've made me smile.

Reviewed by jude forese

Reviewed on October 27, 2003

the deed never really leaves the broken heart... superb fictional account of lost love due to deceivement...

Reviewed by E T Waldron

Reviewed on October 27, 2003

Kay when you write like this I become still as a statue almost without breath so I don't miss a word! Fantastic write, such vivid images!Amazing!

Reviewed by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie

Reviewed on October 27, 2003

This was outstanding Kay, I loved this, so moving and powerfully emotional,

Reindeer

Reviewed by Mr. Ed

Reviewed on October 27, 2003

Glad this is fiction, and I love the form and the broken heart at the end! Great write.

Reviewed by Trish - The Trickster

Reviewed on October 27, 2003

This is one fantastic write...what is it they say "You only hurt the ones you love"....Glad this is fictional!

Reviewed by Taylor Trenton (Reader)

Reviewed on October 27, 2003

Very good Wow what a DEED.

Reviewed by - - - - - TRASK

Reviewed on October 27, 2003

As Long As You Never Look Back You Will Never Become Betrayed Ever Again!

TRASK

Reviewed by Ch'erie de Perrot

Reviewed on October 27, 2003

Looking back, a lump of 4x2 wouldve been a better option :) But we dont think bout that at the time.
;) just kidding. I really like the way you expressed this piece, makes for a nice change to the norm of the way we do poety :)
TY
Ch'erie

Reviewed by P. Michaels (Reader)

Reviewed on October 27, 2003

Kay,

As you said this is fiction. Even so, the deed should have been mentioned. If it was just a hug, maybe he was only comforting someone else who had a broken heart. The truth needs to be faced or found out. Betrayal is a hard thing to write about. You express it very well.

Reviewed by *********** ********** (Reader)

Reviewed on October 27, 2003

Wow!! Power filled pen..fantastic flow to this one Kay..truly enjoyed. ty, Dani

Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson (Reader)

Reviewed on October 27, 2003

You do great fiction
This probably applies to many couples
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Reviewed by Michael Morash (Reader)

Reviewed on October 27, 2003

Fantastic journey. I enjoyed this completely.

Reviewed by Sandie May Joyce (Sandie Angel)

Reviewed on October 27, 2003

Should you had spoken, perhaps it would have gone for the better between the two of you. Okay, I know this is only fictional...

Sandie Angel a.k.a. May Lu :o)

Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)

Reviewed on October 27, 2003

OH Kay,
this one is sharp and emotional so well done.
Peg