Uninhibited violence. The disappearing
she-factor in stem cells at sunset point,
which could not collect the evidence.How
the tomb-sweeping stopped and
candles blown out? This time
the thorns were bleeding, flesh was again
gone out of sight, and the dark silence
ejected from teeth, was mugged by words. Your
kiss arrives in vain, the night was without
a moon. Asleep, a seed sprouts howling
at the crossroads ready to invite the bottom
of abyss at the child’s rape. Come and
see the birthmark on forehead, the map
of his country reddening and oozing.
I am on the run now to graft the
skin on unhealing wounds, unanswerable.
This is by no means that I'm trying to offend you, but I find it so hard to relate to what you are writing, the feelings that you felt, and the words that are used always kept me thinking too hard of why you are feeling the way you feel. What caused your feelings, and why do you write the way you do? I just don't get it at all. Perhaps you have a long lifetime of dissatisfaction about someone, or perhaps things, or disappointment in your life, but without knowing you personally, it is extremely difficult for one to relate to your writings. I don't want to be rude about this, and I'm not trying to offend you at all, but I feel that someone has to point this out to you.
In writing poetry, even if they're short quotes, or short uttering from your soul for pain, but in order to gain empathy from others, you have the obligation to give the reason why you are feeling the way you do. I cannot, out of the blue, just say "I'm feeling bad today" to someone, and yet when someone tries to understand the reason why I'm feeling bad, I don't give an answer. My obligation would have been either to make known beforehand why I'm feeling bad before I said "I'm feeling bad today" or to explain why I'm feeling bad after I've said it.
I don't get your poetry at all. I'm so sorry to have to be the one who has to point this out to you; but as always, I can't hold my tongue if something needs to be spoken. So sorry!!!
Please don't take to offense, for it is not my intention at all to offend you. I just want to let you know how I feel about your poetry.
First Edition Translation of Teselas by Carmen Crespo X111 César Simón Poetry Prixe 2016 Translated from Spanish by Robin Ouzman Hislop and Amparo Arrospíde
Early Works is an exhaustive compilation of the first decade of the poems and stories of Z.B.McClure. Included are family photos, rare personal photos, photos of 1st draft manuscripts of many of his early poems. Also some biography and memoir materia
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In writing poetry, even if they're short quotes, or short uttering from your soul for pain, but in order to gain empathy from others, you have the obligation to give the reason why you are feeling the way you do. I cannot, out of the blue, just say "I'm feeling bad today" to someone, and yet when someone tries to understand the reason why I'm feeling bad, I don't give an answer. My obligation would have been either to make known beforehand why I'm feeling bad before I said "I'm feeling bad today" or to explain why I'm feeling bad after I've said it.
I don't get your poetry at all. I'm so sorry to have to be the one who has to point this out to you; but as always, I can't hold my tongue if something needs to be spoken. So sorry!!!
Please don't take to offense, for it is not my intention at all to offend you. I just want to let you know how I feel about your poetry.
Sandie Angel :o)