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On the Petals of Forget-Me-Nots
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This was actually written for a contest, but then I found the contest had been cancelled, so..I decided to share it here.


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On the Petals of Forget-Me-Nots


A seasonal chorus; Riding the
bluish-gray evening gusts-
Metal hinges; Of the gates,
certain to rust-
Moaning; Creaking; Whispering;
in the ears of the mourning dove-
Landing on the thinning wires; In a
resting thrust


The well bucket swings, back
and forth- A pail of empty thirsts-
Echoing the nightly sounds;
Just as daylight bursts-
Rat-a-tats, against the iron-ore stones,
hand-cut, cold and rough-
Young coyotes yelp harmoniously; Each in
tune with the first


The windmill stands alone; On
the hill just outside- Hoping to fill
it's slat-board sails;
With breaths deep and wide-
A permanent roost; For the 'ol
gray goose-
That one day up and died; Yet not before
it thanked it's host- For the
many joyous rides


The hitchin' post leans heavily, against
a time, life forgot-
Splintered posts of years gone by, left
to weather rot- Autry's voice swoons
sweet and low; Through the webs in
the ole hay loft-
Drifting forever on the cheek of
memories-
and the tender petals, of forget-me-nots


© Lisa Hilbers
8/16/05


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 Reviews of "On the Petals of Forget-Me-Nots"
Reviewed by Katy Walsvik (Reader)
Reviewed on August 21, 2005
Gosh, Lisa... when you paint with words, I envision. I loved your use of hypens and all punctuation, a continuum of dialect and it enhances the "atmosphere" perfectly.

So many phrases could suggest desolation, yet I had a kind of longing to be there, to step back, to just absorb into the scene. 'the tender petals of forget-me-nots' is, maybe, what makes this gentle memory, rather than seeming abandonment. I really love this one. katy xox

Reviewed by Regis Auffray
Reviewed on August 20, 2005
A compelling poem that draws the reader in, Lisa. Thank you for sharing your gift. Love and peace to you.

Regis

Reviewed by William Bonilla
Reviewed on August 19, 2005
no, longer can time be saved in a bottle
fowrad which was only a few blocks away

William ....Peace & Love



Reviewed on August 19, 2005
Lisa,

Captivating imagery makes this poem come alive in the reader's mind; very well written...

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.

Reviewed on August 19, 2005
Lisa-What descriptions- This poem is Excellent- YOur imagery so BiG and Bold- I enjoyed this immensely- Thank 4 it- I liked so many of your descriptions, I won't start writing them out- I am keeping this! in you folder tho' -WArmly,Sheee

Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on August 19, 2005
Fantastic descriptions!

Reviewed by Ronald Hull
Reviewed on August 18, 2005
Vivid and alluring. Like a memory you can never go back to.

A keepper like old mossback pulled from the pond.

Ron

Reviewed by Nordette Adams
Reviewed on August 18, 2005
Their loss, our gain. You rock, Lisa. Good language, flow, and imagery. ~~Nordette

Reviewed by Felix Perry
Reviewed on August 18, 2005
This reaches down and touches my heart and soul, speaking to me and transporting me to a ghost town of another age, one I lived through books and TV programs of my youth. Beautiful write by a beautiful lady thank you for letting us look back in time.

Felix

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
Reviewed on August 18, 2005
Another most outstanding write Lisa!!

Love Tinka

Reviewed by Alain Gracio
Reviewed on August 18, 2005
The title alone pulled me in like a magnet, There is a lot of vibrancy in this poem. Its vivid and colorful and has a lot of spirit.I enjoyend reading this immensely. Dissonance, alliteration, is outstanding.
Cheers
Alain

Reviewed by E T Waldron
Reviewed on August 18, 2005
Lisa you write with such command of your subject, and the finished product is always sublime!Kudo's for another splendid poem!



Eileen

Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
Reviewed on August 18, 2005
You already know how much I like this offering from you. Still, as I read it again, the intense feeling I received about a place I knew so long ago was made even more vivid. thank you.

Reviewed by Janet Parker
Reviewed on August 18, 2005
This is beautiful! I wish some of your glorious creativity would rub off on me. I'm in a slump.

Reviewed by SHERRY HEIM
Reviewed on August 18, 2005
You just have to know that I love this, Lisa...your images are alive and call out of a time so long ago passed. Time marches on, but it is those things that remind us of what once was that seem to tickle our souls. And tickle mine you did, with this wonderful poem. So many great lines, it is hard to choose, but I think my favorites are:

"The hitchin' post leans heavily, against

a time, life forgot-

Splintered posts of years gone by..."

Excellent and vibrant work, Lisa!

Take care,

Sherry


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