She asked " Is this depth realy you ? "
I said it just takes time for me to surface, She smiled " I believe you", we walked,
I got the bends I whispered to myself,
Exhaled,
Sank fast as ever back to the mud floor,
Lungs full,
I love you kid,
I love you so much,
Kiss me,
Save me.
Will,
I like the idea here and I see the metaphor but something bothers me, the end comes too fast; sorry, I don't mean to be negative or overcritical because I do like your writing. I know you'll understand.
John
I wrote this novel several years ago, I self published and never had it to sell. I have decided to rewrite it and hope to get it published within a few months for people to be able to buy. I had a few copies and gave them to a few family members and
This is a sentimental and epic story about a young man, injured in the Viewnam War, who returns to Dallas, Texas, in 1964, and begins rebuilding his life. Set against the rock and roll era of the early 1960’s, when casual sex and recreational drugs w
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Edwin
I like the idea here and I see the metaphor but something bothers me, the end comes too fast; sorry, I don't mean to be negative or overcritical because I do like your writing. I know you'll understand.
John