I have checked out your recent poem since you made some comments of my own recent one and thanks. You've got a good idea here and your treatment is interesting and inspiring. Part of what makes a poem good is the shock of the unexpected thought, like a kind of revelation, such as your last line: "Sitting there, where she has always been." But the language of a poem need to be spot on, in terms of enhancing the meaning. For example, not sure about "lighting blades screaming incantation." Overall, a fine effort. John