"while faint images crawled the hallway floors
loneliness was present as if pure purpose
encased in impatience pierced and filled the void
with an oppressive sense of bleakness"
I must admit that I hate gloomy days, but when a lightning storm is brewing, I go out and sit on my back porch and watch it unfold while my wife hides inside.
rege
Reviewed by Rafika Anderson (Reader)
Reviewed on December 31, 2010
Lovely writing, Carole. I so enjoy the rain. Your depiction of this scene is moving.
Carole, what a beautiful display of imagery, summed up perfectly
in the closing three lines. Also, I love these two lines:
while faint images crawled the hallway floors
loneliness was present as if pure purpose...
-gene
I agree with La Belle. This is an image rich piece that many of us have experienced during a thunderstorm or two. Thank you for sharing.
May the Lord Bless you, and those whom you love, and be with you always, and walk by your side. With love in my heart, joy to the world, peace on earth, & ((((((((((MANY WONDERFUL SISTERLY HUGGGGSSSS)))))))))), your den sister Barbie
"... loneliness was present as if pure purpose encased in impatience pierced and filled the void..." brilliantly expressed, Carole. Another amazing write.
Be Well, Poetess!
Carolyn
Dear Carole, first I am happy to see you again. Your description shines with wonderful colors. As I always say, I admire your style and your perfection. Be well, love Emile
this is classic Carole Mathys -- impressive imagery, emotion grabbing hand over hand with the next powerful thought -- I admire your talents my dear friend -- a beautiful poem -- may peace and love be always with you -- Jon Michael
Strong, arresting word choices and excellent use of image in this fine piece of work, Carole; "...the house seemed to gather its breath..." and "...loneliness was present as if pure purpose encased in impatience pierced and fllled the void..." are just two of the many examples of wonderful writing here.
Carole, you do not write a lot, but when you do what you write is so worth the wait. Beautiful! I can feel the storm's throbbing along with the electricity charged static. Great, thoroughly, verbally painted.
Mark
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loneliness was present as if pure purpose
encased in impatience pierced and filled the void
with an oppressive sense of bleakness"
I must admit that I hate gloomy days, but when a lightning storm is brewing, I go out and sit on my back porch and watch it unfold while my wife hides inside.
rege
-=ra=-
Love Tinka
in the closing three lines. Also, I love these two lines:
while faint images crawled the hallway floors
loneliness was present as if pure purpose...
-gene
May the Lord Bless you, and those whom you love, and be with you always, and walk by your side. With love in my heart, joy to the world, peace on earth, & ((((((((((MANY WONDERFUL SISTERLY HUGGGGSSSS)))))))))), your den sister Barbie
what an amazing picture you have chosen
to accompany your outstanding verses....Bravo
Love & Peace
William
Be Well, Poetess!
Carolyn
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Georg
Beautiful metaphoric poem describing the spring storm which can be Mother Nature showing her fury. Loved it.
Mary
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Anna
GOD BLESS YOU
Tony
Mark