Room On Top- If Only (poem) by Steve Coltman on AuthorsDen

Room On Top- If Only
by Steve Coltman → (All Poetry by Steve Coltman)
Rated "G" by the Author.

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Strife of train / tube travellers in London
Could one move down in the middle of the train A polite request with no disdain Blank looks at best from those with space Others show scorn upon their face Sardines at home beside the door But space for feet we search some more The men that read "The Times" near by They'll give you room.....and pigs will fly The popular station it now approaches We'll all get off these crowded coaches Those at the door will fall out first But now the middle man's at his worst They don't move down for people to board But push right past the leaving hoard To alight in first place is all they're after Ignoring derision and sarcastic laughter But now the train is not so full The middle men less, they're on the dole Arrogant passengers when they're incumbent Now not so clever cos they're redundant 06/01/10 © Steve Coltman

Reviewed by La Belle Rouge Poetess Of The Heart

Reviewed on January 3, 2010

Witty and well penned, enjoyed

Reviewed by Michelle Mead

Reviewed on January 1, 2010

This is well-written, really tight (no pun intended), I like it alot. Plus, it reminds me of my first of 4 trips to London and a poor man who was stuck in the middle of the tube, holding on the the thingy hanging down from the top of the car, and being all crammed in like sardines, and at the next stop, MORE people actually tried to squeeze in where not even a mouse could have squeezed and the man in the middle yelled, "EXCUSE ME, CAN'T YOU SEE THAT NO ONE ELSE CAN FIT IN HERE??" LOL, thanks for the memory and the laugh.