Very impressive. I love your coined words in the third haiku, and I love the gorgeous imagery in the last cinquain, but my favorite of all, was that second haiku-- great play on words and their meanings... cloudly-- hovering, ominous, silent, puffed up (for a pounce?), ready to rain, slowly moving, stealthy; precipitating-- shooting forward, speeding, hurling from the sky, raining, snowing... incredible play! kudos for that one for sure.
Also, have you read "The Lament of the Blacksmith" by Leo Durrant? Your "Fencing" reminds me very much of it. Check it out if you get the time. I love Leo's writes. On the surface, many of them are whimsical, wry and witty, but he's got incredible depth as well.--well worth the read.
You certainly have it Daniel! What 'it' is remains a mystery but I'd like a liberal dose of it.
Incredible creativity and a poet's eye for detail missed by many.
Amazing!
Chanti
Substantially better than the average bear's scribbles. ;-) I like how you play with the joining of words, creating adjectives that add to imagery--"fullmoondamp evening," "water tricklethreads"
Kewl beans.
Nordette
Strongly imagist and full of conviction, I have been knocked-out by these; especially love the cinquains - a new form to me - and they are wonderfully enhanced by the excellent choice of titles. You inspire me to try the same!! Really grabbed, too, by the runtogether words of the last haiku - very captivating! Love these, thank you! Kate xx
I enjoyed them all, but Shamless Sky was absolutely enchanting!
Reviewed by Ted Sheridan (Reader)
Reviewed on November 23, 2004
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Reviewed by Katy Walsvik (Reader)
Reviewed on November 23, 2004
If beauty truly be in 'the eyes of the beholder', dear heart, then mine are absolutely dazzled just now. You are a spell-caster, indeed! love,katydid xox.
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Also, have you read "The Lament of the Blacksmith" by Leo Durrant? Your "Fencing" reminds me very much of it. Check it out if you get the time. I love Leo's writes. On the surface, many of them are whimsical, wry and witty, but he's got incredible depth as well.--well worth the read.
Take care. --Charlie
Incredible creativity and a poet's eye for detail missed by many.
Amazing!
Chanti
Kewl beans.
Nordette
Love Tinka
Peace, Carole