My first attempt at a villanelle. Bill DeVault and I were talking about these at the bookstore last night. I went back there tonight to compose this over a cup of peppermint tea. Bill, this is for you.
Before the tangled throes of Spring would come,
and the rippling mists of eve would rise,
two souls must match the beat of angry drum.
Two bodies drunk upon the season's rum
should spare sweet space between the inner thighs
before the tangled throes of Spring would come.
There are few depths to which their hearts won't plumb.
Before they sever all their fleshy ties,
two souls must match the beat of angry drum.
The rotted bark all trees would bear is numb,
unless the roots attain a brutal size
before the tangled throes of Spring would come.
To reach their sacred goal of rhythmic hum,
while bodies throb and scream immortal highs,
two souls must match the beat of angry drum.
They each must know the worlds where they are from
if each would live within the other's eyes.
Before the tangles throes of Spring would come,
two souls must match the beat of angry drum.
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Reviews of "Before the Tangled Throes of Spring Would Come"
I think this is a superb offering well-shared. Thank you for this gift. Love and peace to you, Daniel,
Regis
Reviewed by Katy Walsvik (Reader)
Reviewed on March 30, 2006
I'm not familiar with the word "villanelle" in or outside poetry. But when you string words together, dear DannyMac, I have visions... I enter my own mind and feel a blending with yours. You really have no equal. good ol' katydid xoxoxox
You left a couple comments on mine and I thought I'd check your poems out. This style seems to give such a satisfying feeling when you get to the end. Takes a good poet to be able to express beauty under such a critical style. I like it!
wow...I need to look up some of these different styles and give them a try..this is fantastic! I felt like a was spinning in circles as I read it :)
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
Reviewed on March 28, 2006
I tried the villanelle a time or two, but I can say here and now, that neither of them came up to this one's measure. Very good. Reading it, you get a sense of riding a merry-go-round.
Hey, pretty well done, Mr. MT...not bad. The French Sonnet form is pretty challenging, but yields strong results, no? I figured, as soon as we discussed this form you wouldn't be able to resist trying your hand at it...real artists live for challenges.
Hello MP...
it's been awhile since I've visited ....see you have not lost the muse..
I feel this poem's mood so very earthy cold and heavy.
as if lost souls struggled to regain something which is lost..and never to be found.
I keep re-reading it..
Cheers..
G
Okay, Mp, not being to very intelligent, I have no clue what "villanelle" would be nor does my Word Web program...but what you wrote could turn me on, even in my old and depleted age...LOL! If that is what it was supposed to do, then it did its job, if not, sorry...Ed
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When Sophie Bayles inadvertently ruins a young man’s chance for employment, she sets out to find him a new position. Even though he doesn’t want her to.
Regis
glad i stopped by
pax A
Oh Ed saw the thigh thingy and lost the moral of it I guess..lol!!
Love Tinka
it's been awhile since I've visited ....see you have not lost the muse..
I feel this poem's mood so very earthy cold and heavy.
as if lost souls struggled to regain something which is lost..and never to be found.
I keep re-reading it..
Cheers..
G
Susan