The first part of the poem, you paint a very vivid picture, and then you launch your fists. I find the "O's" to be a bit over dramatic, but perhaps that is just my culture. (I tend to get a bit over dramatic myself at times.) Anyway, if ever you wanted to come back to this poem and rework it, I think I'd leave the "“How long will you sleep
O’ Mugabe, O’ Mugabe!"--perhaps cutting out the second "O'" and then continue on with the images without the "O's" except for possibly at the end. I actually think it would be more powerful. But all of that is up to you.
I too am concerned about hunger in the world. My pet project, lifting Haiti out of the muck of poverty. I wish you luck in your endeavors. --Charlie
Five years have passed. The sequel to the award-winning Chapel of Eternal Love, this book revisits the same couples in the first book, and where the lives have taken them since they left the altar at The Chapel of Eternal Love
Imogene, a country-bred girl, longs to make a life for herself in New York City. She joins forces with her former college roommate to start a movie production company in the big city.
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O’ Mugabe, O’ Mugabe!"--perhaps cutting out the second "O'" and then continue on with the images without the "O's" except for possibly at the end. I actually think it would be more powerful. But all of that is up to you.
I too am concerned about hunger in the world. My pet project, lifting Haiti out of the muck of poverty. I wish you luck in your endeavors. --Charlie
riddled with the facts of life
Peace be with you and the children in need
all over the world
William
Robbie
Good write with a sound message!
Glad to see you Bhuwan!
Sandie May Angel :o)