We can abstain from the voices of the reality
But not abstain from the echo of the memories
Because memories will never leave us, but like an
Apparition it will come back to haunt our ability
And divert the course of our surreptitious destiny
Towards the residence of amorphous uncertainty
Copyright 2003 Bhuwan Thapaliya
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Reviewed by Richard Vallance (Reader)
Reviewed on October 14, 2003
Forgive me, Buwan, for stating the obvious.
The IMAGERY in this poem is both astute and lovely; so is the picture.
But you should try and get the poem's rhythms to match (they're a bit bumpy...)
I sense the lines are too long.
Perhaps recasting the poem in a few more lines, but each as a tetrameter might help.
Married ten years, and more in love than ever, Robert and Marcie have everything to live for. But a terrible secret is breaking Robert's heart: he knows that Marcie is about to die...
The IMAGERY in this poem is both astute and lovely; so is the picture.
But you should try and get the poem's rhythms to match (they're a bit bumpy...)
I sense the lines are too long.
Perhaps recasting the poem in a few more lines, but each as a tetrameter might help.
Just a suggestion.
Richard Vallance
*Marlene*
Nancy
~Nikki~
~Chrissie
All we can do is make sure we got enough good memories to "haunt" us.
Love
S
Oh this is just "AWESOME"
Excellent write...
Trixie :)
This brought back some real heartfelt memories to me!!
Lovely thoughful write Bhuwan!!
Love
Tinka
In Spirit,
Bear
Reindeer
excellent
William
David