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I have read and commented on poems of
others. These are three short poems
for others to comment on, if they wish:
A Passing
The dim swart oblong off the bow below the sea surface
slowly gains colors, the yellow and tan of polished shoes,
then four moving limbs, an up-jutting head, a carapace,
and lastly, a being, gorgeous in the blue amphibian (meaningless
a thousand miles at sea), a turtle, hundred fold heavier
than its cousins in the inland creeks at home; we will slowly pass.
Without fins, scales, or propelling tail, it paddles about
as my spaniel puppy in this my first ever sighting, seemingly not
headed anywhere, idling, of companions
companions solely without.
About amidships a swell lifts it deck
to look
me squarely in the eye to exult in its
long swims and remind
of their victory over the hares. But
from a subliminal nook
in my brain different notions arise;
swift porpoise lark
about in schools, small black whales
swim by in lanquid pods,
tuna roil the sea in numbers uncount-
able; even stingaree and shark
do not swim so singly; you, turtle,
alone are so alone,
awkward dog paddler, only half at home;
astern now you are
the lonesomest thing I have ever
seen; I poignantly reckon
as I stare at you fading awayl, that
my own war-, sea-
small-ship loneliness pales beside
your birth-bound solitude,
and that for this day, maybe more,
lightens my bounden war legacy.
Point of View
They are noble, people say,
and they are too
in what they do,
guide the blind on the way.
But have you ever known
a Seeing Eye Dog
that didn't slog,
duty-depressed, head down.
So you who turn to admire
think too how great
the old wolf's forfeit
to eat leftovers, sleep by the fire.
At Fukuoka
I step ashore and
see
only streets, bare streets,
nothing along them
to bespeak a city
where
once stood
homes, hospitals, hotels,
courthouses, firehouses, butchershops,
fish markets, cafes, groceries,
dairies, playgounds, schools,
post offices, drugstores, factories,
stadiums, temples, churches.
Inside the now
two dimensional
polygon street geometry
there is only
rubble
work product of long-distance, lever-
pulling, switch-pressing , bomb-blasting
war
by unblooded fly-boys
who saw only brown puffs
or bright flashes,
no dismembered mothers,
no charbroiled children,
far below.
Along the polygons
I make out
not a lintel, not a stud, not a fascia,
not a jamb, not a door frame, not a pillar,
not a rafter, not a joist, not a gable,
not a stair step, not a table, not a see-saw,
not a butcher block, not a pew, not an alter,
not a law book, not a fire hose, not a school desk,
only charred shattered
rubble.
Although two of these have some rhyme, I don't normally write in rhyme.
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Point Of View-The guide dogs live to get petted and walk. They are true companions. A lovely writing.
CarolHawks
The second poem of the seeing eye dog was appropriate because it reminds us that we have made slaves of living creatures that have no choice if they want to live and be kept. I imagine circus performing dolphins feel the same way but can't hand their heads. I read somehwere that dolphins living in captivity have a shorter lifespan compared to wild dophins.
The last poem depicts the total destruction of war. I served in Vietnam as a field radio operator in the Marines in 1966. We lost less than 50,000 in Vietnam but killed more than two million--many innocent mothers and children that were in the way as the bombs and shells fell from the sky. I saw Puff the Magic Dragon flying slowly in circles spewing more than six thousand rounds a minute at the jungle below, stripping trees of leaves and turning humans into blood red fog.
Susan
Vesna:)
Well said.
Thank you for sharing them.
L. T. Goslee
Enjoyed the reading of "Short Poems", "A Passing", "Point of View", and "At Fukuoka".
Your works show a unique style of One that feels the aroma of wisdom, knowledge and art.
Welcome!
Please, keep posting, Poet!
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU