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A Stroll Through my soul
Part 1
I walked along the beach,
Feeling the warm sand at my feet.
It seemed I strolled for hours,
By evening I was so beat.
I stopped and sat awhile,
So I could collect my thoughts,
For the hurt I’d hidden deep inside,
Could be washed out with the rocks.
The marks the anger left inside,
Will forever be written on my soul,
The hurtful words spoken in anguish,
Are things that would forever go untold.
The Lost love I held so long,
With one I’d always hold so dear,
The one I shared by whole life with,
Admitted, no longer did he care.
As I sat there all alone and blue,
Trying to think of what is it I should do,
I heard a voice speak, as he asked me why,
Why do I sit on the beach, just to cry.
A gentle voice and a kind and caring smile,
How I needed someone to listen to my words,
To comfort me, if just for a while.
He sat and listened to me attentively,
To every word I sigh,
And comforted me with open arms,
When I began to cry.
He gave that tender smile my way,
That made me feel quiet at ease,
And said if it’s an ear you need right now,
Trust in me if you please.
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Love & hugs
George
I have been there, I am still trying to get that deep relationship out of my head..It takes time, and that time is in Rose time!!!!
Peace, Love, and Light,
Amber "V"
Could be washed out with the rocks.
could or couldnt be...?
perhaps you were waiting for them TO be washed...?
im not sure... something in this line doesnt quite work...?
He sat and listened to me attentively,
To every word I sigh,
you should prolly think about changing 'i sigh' to 'i'd sigh' or 'i sighed' to keep the tense all the same throughout the piece
i think 'stroll' is a most delightful word.
it gives one the illusion of unhurried moving through life...
in this case the idea of strolling through ones soul sounds very... cathartic.
i think if you dont take the occaisional stroll through your soul/emotions/etc then you become very out of touch with your feelings and your ability to move on from hurts and pain is impaired.
i also think beaches are the most magical things.
the way the waves pound against the shore when youre angry and the way they sand with the sand when your dancing and singing for joy...
i shall have to try and catch the second party of your story because i feel you left this at the crucial moment haha!
LOVE YA! SC
God is the maker of the sea and the refuge from the storms of life.
May He bless and renew your spirit.
Love,
Connie
Of deep feelings felt within
Peace be with you
William
Love & Peace
Hugs
Your Cuz