Music loud
Tangled with smoke
Not that cancerous smoke
Not that smoke that got you choking
Our bodies collide in agony
Faces twisted….that dancehall
Got our bodies colliding in agony
Crying
Spilling all over us both
And we be mellow
Like that shade crushing in our veins
We be like banging
Smeared paint inside a colleague of faces
Colliding in sweet agony
Sun went down screaming
Just got happy heating the air
Just got good and comfortable being there
He went down screaming
Steaming
And we be like fire
Blazing and colliding
With twisted faces
We be like grinding into each other
Hot
Smeared like paint into a sea of faces
I know I hear the morning birds singing
I know I smell the fresh air of a sun left dreaming
…of our bodies
shadow and dust
working baby and grinding
dancehall walls still screaming
like the sun
like our bodies in agony
Oh God know….I must be dreaming
We be like twisted in reality
Twisted colliding in agony
With that dancehall music still loud
Still crying out in agony
I done smoked too much
I done got mellow
Too too mellow
Smoke and ashes
And ashes and smoke and ashes
Made my glasses cloud
With the sun screaming so loud
And we done made it rain in here
Hot wetness raining our bodies
Screaming in agony
……. “Oh Precious Lord”
(that devil music)
got my body quivering with energy released
hit that knob
hit them switches
blown out candles (more smoke and ashes)
I wipe your shadow off my shower walls
Cause morning done brought me back to life
Back to reality
Aberjhani
Many stanzas I liked also I think the below is my fav though..smile
"We be like banging
Smeared paint inside a colleague of faces"
Cause morning done brought me back to life
Back to reality"
This whole poem is outstanding, I could feel the your voice coming through this one. But I especially love the last three lines.I think your voice gets stronger all the time.
debra
Smeared paint inside a colleague of faces
Colliding in sweet agony...
So many lines in this writhing write that are just sheer ELECTRIC, Mitzi, and the imagery and energy draws me in and sets me fizzing and no mistake. I could jive to this one all night long and am loathe to leave... your passion is catching... and I just LOVE to dance... alone or with others, this girl just GOTTA!! :)) So colourful and action-packed, an explosive canvas that bursts off the page. Love the finale in the shower, too - soooo refreshing! TY Kate xx
Enjoyed reading this work of yours...
Nice.....Art Sun...
Now, to get me back to reality...
Ron
Love,
Eileen
Well done Mitzi!!
Love Tinka
Fee
Light and Wisdom ...
You got good stuff.
This one P U L S E S with the rhythm of L I F E! An amazingly exotic/erotic dance of pleasure, your words--well done!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Mitzi Ya Jus Gotta Make Z Best Of Those GOOD Memories...
TRASK