Rising Beyond
by Odin odin@aflx.com — Read all 3,869 poems by Odin odin@aflx.com
Regardless of race, creed or color, letting go is letting go—a universal sorrow.
Monday, February 17, 2014
Rising Beyond
by Odin Roark
Sadness shackled his heart
Dry eyes did forever weep
Pain knowing no release
Death seducing reason
How often he had tried
The purge of wounded breath
Remaining dormant
In lungs long exhausted
His voice inhabited silence
His spirit roamed homeless
Days came and went
Without sunrise or sunset
This day he did climb
Through conifer and juniper
Traversing granite cracks
As voices of the wind bade summons
Atop an airless summit
He did stand
Nature’s cardinal points
They did beckon
The west
Held cloud mixed sunshine
The east
Did lightning strike
From north and south
Did arched rainbow appear
From his pocket he did draw
Silver vessel forged ancestral
Its contents of ash expectant
His grieving fingers unsteady
Ghostly cremains rose skyward
Cherished spirit did soar
Lightning’s echo vented quiet
Airless summit found chorus
She was free
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However, I found the use of "did" quite disquieting. I could change every line with did in it and still have a poem with the same meaning. "Dry eyes forever wept." "This day he climbed." "He stood." "They beckoned." "Lightning struck." "Arched rainbow appeared." "Cherished spirit soared."
Ron
A poem from the depth of your heart. Enjoyed!
Love and blessings,
Linda
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