Andy, it works for me. There lies herein the maturity of a tenured lover and poet my friend. You have expressed the emotion perfectly and with great passion. May love and peace be with you always my friend. Jon Michael
?Hear that?? "No question: it works" - and then some! This is such a "perfect utterance" that is seems vaguely familiar, as so it should: a classic of all time, if ever there was one. The pitch, balance and emotion are breathtaking. Not one word out of place or wasted. This is a work of crystal clarity, where heart, mind and spirit are brought into an aligned epiphanic instant. This is revelation's pure work. Hallowed words which create hallowed space around them. Complete.
I have to keep re-reading that final stanza. As you say "not sure that this works", are you aware of how naturally brilliant that unseen pause is between the second and third line? Ponder it: it is natural to you and much of your work. An innate poetical device where you link thoughts in this seamless manner without all the clutter of syntax. This is a gift and a strength - work it! :)) xx
This is one of the most beautiful love poems I have ever read. You have a bardic gift for romance. This would make any of the ladies you write about proud.
Blessings, XXX
Christine
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Margaret
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Anna
I have to keep re-reading that final stanza. As you say "not sure that this works", are you aware of how naturally brilliant that unseen pause is between the second and third line? Ponder it: it is natural to you and much of your work. An innate poetical device where you link thoughts in this seamless manner without all the clutter of syntax. This is a gift and a strength - work it! :)) xx
The Language of
Beautiful Passion Andy!!
Through The Hidden Forrest...
Vickie
John
are you stating naked women are seasonal? ;)
GOD BLESS YOU
TONY
Cheers,
Dan
Blessings, XXX
Christine