There's a local reading series that takes place in Halifax every Tuesday evenings. It's called the "Shoestring Reading Series". Takes place at The Economy Shoe Shop, a local bar. This poem was written for one of the readings I took part in. It's currently under submission to a contest involving poetry and imbibables.
Bar Song
High above the bar stools
that's where the life clings-
the cigarette smoke pretzels
like knots of wild pine grain,
the beer fumes and belches ferment
with all the boasts and love songs,
a thousand hard luck stories
thrown like stones in a wished out well,
pasteboard smiles of regret,
hollowed out pipedreams,
the sour candy apples of hops and hope,
the grease of alcohol streaked in a dirty shot glass
all of this haloes down over the balding head
of a man you call Bill or Curly or Mike
and when he asks you what'll it be
you try to forget what ever it was.
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Reviews of "Bar Song"
Reviewed by Sharon Masters (Reader)
Reviewed on April 19, 2003
I like it! I can see it, I can smell it (ew), I'm right there ...
This was good stuff, I liked the images of big butt cracks sitting on stools and the roar of belching as a backdrop. Tempting me to pour another one.
Reviewed by Adrienne Dominici (Reader)
Reviewed on April 19, 2003
Very well done, I felt like I was there in, I especially liked "wished out wells" and particularly the last two lines. Great job.
I enjoyed the journey.
Reviewed by Elizabeth Taylor (Reader)
Reviewed on April 19, 2003
"...a thousand hard luck stories
thrown like stones in a wished out well,
pasteboard smiles of regret,
hollowed out pipedreams,
the sour candy apples of hops and hope,..."
This book represents a thirty-day period of my poetry journal. Each poem addresses
the dominant thoughts occupying my mind during the early morning hours of a given
day.
Questions, unquestioned discoveries, and answers in parable and rhyme…. This collection records a journey starting with a 1960s retrospective and the first man on the moon, moving to a new millennium welcomed in with a terrorist spin, family crises,
\sharon\
Sandie Angel :o)
I enjoyed the journey.
thrown like stones in a wished out well,
pasteboard smiles of regret,
hollowed out pipedreams,
the sour candy apples of hops and hope,..."
Why I avoid them. Well done, great imagery.