I will dispense with any indication of how I arrived at the following lines, though it would be interesting to know what others think of my observations. What could have been the scenario to engender such poetic ascertainment of human behaviour?
Where does it lead you, if anywhere?
I have made two attempts to finalise this poem,
Therefore, I have posted them both, the second in a slightly different style and direction.
When I become famous, I may write a third!
That is if the devil will allow me such freedom from my designated chores.
First attempt.
T‘was not that white glove- you dropped at my feet:
with its subtle fragrance, of fresh Dolce Gabbana.
Curation’s moirai - sought ineluctable meet
as time’s last hunter, of our yester’s Ostara.
Where vernal over-reaches versant on its own:
and peers not, those passing fermits -of-night.
It fears not Machiavellian’s ferine cologne
whose, dark lust, needs to betray ne’er a light.
For seldom, it’s pled, in past aislings o’ dead,
where passion’s presence, it did wither and die.
That love’s but –appetence set fair in our head,
when, time’s agrestal rose, is verisimilar- awry.
Where amative thorn rips- vitea fabric apart
to show id’s arcanum -its own pollent of heart.
And cries like hamartia’s- reverent banshees, of Hell
When, aphotic secret- sensorium’s portents do tell.
For it’s in jostled sin of machinations own joy
That gives muse, its entourage- and suite to employ.
Second attempt. In a Somewhat different direction.
It was not your white glove: of ‘invitant côté’
or esoterism of Dolce and Gabbana.
It needs not curation; give voice its vendee,
or self, a set of reply:
Those thoughts perceived by its drama,
or truths it seeks now deny.
It fears not ferity’s Machiavellian cologne
whose, lech plies serotine ne’er a light.
A purpose pled, of poet’s darker eosin
that lacquers its last icon dark,
in those flames wafted by feigned self-fright.
Or emotions of a divided tetrarch
Where zetetic thought flourish and approval apply
Affaire de Coeur; appetence set on afar.
Truth dare not deny agrestic lusts of a sigh
for Sibyl sees its self-lenition
where Sistine’s pale is set so ajar,
to mindedness of attraction...
As amative thorn rips- vitea fabric apart
and cries hamartia’s reverent orée:
To show arcana’s, own pollent of heart,
like vagrant virgins of night.
Aphotic secrets, of their portent’s ennui
and cries of their sometimes delight.
For it in jostled sin of darker envoy
that gives muse entourage and suite to deploy.
As we retrieve fortuity's symbolic white glove.
Which salient action, be then seen as ours;
Intrinsic fortuity’s black Baccara of love:
Man’s ruminate motif, of own dark hued hours.
Unfortunately, time and energy spent elsewhere makes me allow others to either praise or deny praise for what you have written. If my inclination is right, then you did not communicate to the masses (and include me there among the poetry of uneducated). However, among poetry aficionados, your poem may be superb.
Ron
Regis
Thank you for your observations. It was never my intention to make easy for the reader.
This was drawn from a real live scenario I observed in an up market bar in Madrid, I merely changed from narrator to active participant in the proceedings.
I imagine that you were spot on with fifty quid, or more than likely it was a thousand pesetas.
I'll see what I can come up with for fifty quid. (-: