Undermining strategy needing a
deep reserve of determination
and resolve impeding gainful
movement forward into
ramifications by the shifting
sand of your castle standing
in your way, pretty though
it may be, quickly becoming
one's liability
Unsettled in ways that make
it hard to get in touch with
your inner spirit of stability
when engaging gusting winds
Leave the sands with footprints
building on solid foundation any
given Sunday..a coming home
indicative within
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
"Our best built certainties are
but sand-houses and subject to
damage from any wind of doubt
that blows"
~Mark Twain~
(c) Build for a Wind
20September2012
Vivian L Dawson
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Reviewed by Diana Legun (Reader)
Reviewed on October 1, 2012
What strikes home for me are these words: "...pretty though it may be, quickly becoming/one's liability." This poem holds enormous credibility. ~~ Diana
To build from within is where we will find our greatest strengths, Let the Wind Blow~
Reviewed by Rory Dall (Reader)
Reviewed on September 23, 2012
For some reason a Hendrix song came into my mind when I read this poem on the theme of transience. I suppose no-one has come up with a better analogy than the sand castle. I like the little nod to John Muir's famous saying about footprints.
i really like what Roger said here. This is wonderful poetry
Reviewed by Roger Wayne Eberle
Reviewed on September 22, 2012
I enjoy the verbal dexterity with which you bombard your reader in an active passage through your poem, especially in this case where your subject is at once so static and impermanent... oh, the sophistry that goes into firming up so shaky a foundation as that house built of sand... yet all it takes is a shift in perspective to buttress bastions of faith and formulate a far firmer foundation... I also like the way you leave us with the internal ... it has to be an inner transformation, doesn't it? I agree wholeheartedly with Christine's concise comment below.
To the strength of a stable core...
Roger
Reviewed by Lily of Lough Neagh C. Dennis-Woosley
Reviewed on September 22, 2012
Nothing is ever certain with the exception of strife,
life, death, hunger, and taxes...all we can do is fortify all
we try to achieve around us and within us and then have a back
up plan :)
I like the work. I was particularly struck by the thought of a thing of pleasure so easily becoming a liability. Our foundations are the key, indeed. Be well, Kathy
Vivian, Beautifully stated...there are always obstacles we need to overcome to get the right path for which we are to be on.
Enjoyed much...
Deborah
Reviewed by ANNA CLOUTIER (Reader)
Reviewed on September 21, 2012
SAND CASTLES...HAVE NO DURABILITY LET US LIVE OUR LIVES AND MAKE DECISIONS THAT ARE SOUND..GIVING THEM A GREAT DEAL OF THOUGHT.
KEEP GOING VIVIAN...ANOTHER GOOD ONE TO SHARE WITH US TODAY, ANNA
This collection of poetry addresses the nature of time, reflections on the natural world, the difficulty of loss,
contemporary social issues and gratitude for life.
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The inner spirit of stability. Wonderful write.
Keegan loves this "Sand Castle" !
Lady Mary Ann
Your poem, on the other hand, is sound advice for those who build houses of their lives without considering the nature of their environment.
Ron
Regis
To the strength of a stable core...
Roger
life, death, hunger, and taxes...all we can do is fortify all
we try to achieve around us and within us and then have a back
up plan :)
wonderful write Vivian
Love and Light
Lily
Blessings,
Christine
budd
fee
Enjoyed much...
Deborah
KEEP GOING VIVIAN...ANOTHER GOOD ONE TO SHARE WITH US TODAY, ANNA