Their black wings
Followed me
Home
Night after
Perilous night
Their black wings
Followed me
Home
Night after
Perilous night
Vicious
Was their call
A black mass -
A rattling rasp -
Of brooding thoughts!
Always
They were there
Perched upon
An empty bough
Outside my window
Upon an ash gray tree
As they screamed
Into the night, their terror!
Until there was a deathly silence
In the spring
They had driven
Away
The song birds
The ones that nested
In the maiden
Green hair
Of my window tree
Where the sweet
Leaves of life
Once had hung
In the lofty wisp
Of a springtime breeze
Before they screamed
Into the night of terror
Until there was a deathly silence
Ah, I knew
It was ill
Omened
That they should
Be there, ever present
Ugly as sin
With their black
Wings beating
Out a litany of fear!
Shedding tumult
And darkness
Through my life
From the naked
Cursed bough
Of the ash gray tree
Where they screamed
Into the night, their terror!
Until the only thing left me
Was the sound of their deathly silence
What a work of art. The imagery is priceless. The word choice couldn't have been better. I need to read more, but I had to comment before hand. I am anxious to read on. I love to write poetry as well, but I am in the beginning stage! I hope you will critique my works so I can improve. (Or atleast tell me that I am wasting my time!) Thank you very much...
Hello Stranger~ So very nice to hear from you again. I'm thrilled to see you're still writing away. I've always enjoyed reading your work. You are such a talent!
Good luck with your new rekindled romance!
Happy New Year!
Victoria
Reviewed by Theresa Rayman (Reader)
Reviewed on August 2, 2005
This is extremely well written with great imagery and language. I like the way the one word lines support the empty, dark theme and the repetiton of "deathly silence" is really effective. Good work!
Take Care-TGR
Excellent mood piece, Ron! Oddly enough, I just returned from Berlin where I consider the crows my companions because I watch them every year from my window...their antics are endearing.
Sounds like you live in North east Baltimore.
Actually the crows are our friends, they're nicer to be around plus they eat a lot of the small pest and some pigeons. It's those flying rat pigeons that get on my nerve. As many black birds as we have around here, you never see them all nested up messing up your house.
Pray for the light. Pray that you last that long. The Long Hour Before Light is a classic collection of Horror tales, re-mastered by Champagne Book Group
Christine
Good luck with your new rekindled romance!
Happy New Year!
Victoria
Take Care-TGR
This is a wonderful poem.
I Really love it!!
Thanks
Tracey
Excellent poem with a very good ending.
ShyPoet1
Love in Christ~~
Bonnie Q
Unicorn Haven
Gina
JC xoxoxo
Poe would be proud to have written such a great poem as this...ty, Dani
Actually the crows are our friends, they're nicer to be around plus they eat a lot of the small pest and some pigeons. It's those flying rat pigeons that get on my nerve. As many black birds as we have around here, you never see them all nested up messing up your house.