...well... a poem in the making, perhaps! :)) This is about as Halloweeny as I get: boo! xx
EDENARNIA
The smash-and-grab of a storm-ridden sunset was stealing like knives through windows of his lakeside cabin. A small pile of ash was long-cold in the grate, his arid mouth tasting its bittersweet as he slowly drew shut the door on the all-but-empty room and hammered the newly-carved nameplate into its timbers.
His calloused hands were still bleeding and splintered from all their recent months of work: exactly a year to complete the fine armoire he had just left in the cabin’s brightest corner. Its twin, sculpted doors faced out across ruffling waters over which the new moon would soon rise like a gash in the dark silk of sky.
With exhaustion in his heart and arms, he trudged back towards the Big House. His collar was drawn against the wind as it creaked through the trees – building now exactly as it had last year. Back then, his nails were smooth: cuticles like tonight’s crescent moon, fingers used to wielding no more than a pen before this fevered desire to axe, chop then delicately carve. The snap of twigs beneath his feet was like the crack of brittle bones.
On this night twelve months’ ago, she had shimmied into a midnight-blue gown, striking a pose behind her feathered Venetian mask; “Tempest’s so fitting”, she laughed, “for a Halloween ball!” Later, rosy and flushed from the dance, he had waltzed her into the marbled hall (spangled beneath its dangling chandelier), grabbed a fur from the groaning coat-rack and rustled her down the misty track through the spinney to the cabin.
There they spilled fresh cones from their pockets and lit a small blaze. Then slipped from bear skin… slept in bare skin.
In the grey of early morning, the old pine had felled her as she ran lightly ahead in the chase back to the house. He attacked its blackened trunk in grief-stricken frenzy before turning his pain to craft: seasoning its elegant knotted timbers with aromatic oils, fashioning an exquisite cabinet for the sole occupancy of her mask and dress.
Here they hang now in their new place of dark. Tonight they breathe again with remembrance of her warm, soft curves, wafting her scent that still lingers in their tucks, beads and intimate seams. The dress of midnight blue will sway and shimmer with the glow of ruddy sparks from their fir-cone fire, glisten from the spills of black cherry wine dripped from moist lips, clinked from smeared glasses.
And pips will gleam in the core of the apple they shared – putting down roots, sprouting shoots of unseasonal green.
OF COURSE, I HAD TO READ THE POEM AND I LIKE BOTH THE PROSE AND THE POETRY FORM. SAD...BUT BEAUTIFUL AND I FIND THAT EACH IS DONE WELL AND ENJOYED. LOVE, BLESSINGS & FAITH...JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS
Great moments of creativity in this story, Kate. I especially like the part of rememberance at the end. It's a chilling moment. Makes me think of when I look at my wedding dress:)
Sheila
Lovely prose poem. 'New author' are the words that spring to mind; I have a feeling that you're getting closer and closer to publication dates. Astrologer Ken
A different style, a different facet of your writing... Some brilliant ideas here Kate, such as the "bear skin" turning into "bare skin". It could be a "poem in the making", as you say, but this piece works perfectly the way it is, in my opinion.
Your writing brings forth so many vivid images to savor. I think is some ways we all create our own armoires as tributes to loved ones who have passed on. But those armoires bring us comfort when we visit them and can relive the glory of those days gone by...
This story, to me, was reminiscent of Queen Victoria and the depth of love that she showed by having her husband's clothes laid out for him every morning after his death. That story, as well as yours, makes me smile to hear of the love that two hearts can hold for one another.
Cryssa
P.S. Hope you and your in-laws are both feeling better...
Tragedy walks the wooded pathways and reconciliation is hewed by a grievous heart and soul with the hands of abject grief. A fallen timber will be rendered,a sacrificial monument to death. There is light from the warm glow love left to gently smolder within him for eternity. A Halloween rendering of exceptional clarity, clouded with deft touches of gray over coloring a masterpiece. Ah, Kate my dear friend. Had I but imagined. I should have settled down with this special event while enjoying afternoon tea. Did I love it! Let there be no doubts. Love and peace to you my dear friend. Jon Michael
Breathtaking visual journey of unabashed lover's romance. You send off your glow of sensuality and brilliance. I am so glad I read this before bed, I shall dream of love's darkness and rapture.
Peace, love and light, and Happy Halloween!
Stunning story...so complete and so heart wrenchingly filled with emotion. I love the idea of this one ...the forever tribute to a love he would never hold again but always possess. Very nicely done Kate.
fee
vividly crafted atmosphere and imagery ... a shared experience that felt smooth, aromatic and intoxicating ... colorful, dark and enticing ...
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
Reviewed on October 31, 2010
Sad tale of love dashed by nature's cruel hand of fate. The story was well told, Kate, and by George it most certainly could be made into a dark poem. Love the appleness of their love.
From First Love to its destructive end and on to new beginnings, Mary Angela Nangini's poems explore the birth and death of a relationship. The powerful poems are presented in two parts with an introduction to her next book My Ontario Beautiful. (Th
Sheila
S t u n n i n g achievement, my friend.
Just sign me, N. AWE
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Always,
Deborah
Axilea
This story, to me, was reminiscent of Queen Victoria and the depth of love that she showed by having her husband's clothes laid out for him every morning after his death. That story, as well as yours, makes me smile to hear of the love that two hearts can hold for one another.
Cryssa
P.S. Hope you and your in-laws are both feeling better...
Love it.
Walt
Have I told you lately that you write good? -gene.
great pen keep it spinning.
Regis
Peace, love and light, and Happy Halloween!
Amber
You sure know how to write!
Blessings,
Christine
Not sure why it's in poetry, or am I on the story page?
Nice effort. even if on the wrong page :) xxx
fee
Kate Burnside writes Gothic...and how!
John