This life is all but dissipated Ballooned and blown out long before its time I have fought the discontent and selfish side steps For a million miles, wearily I dread a million more And these eyes have blinded by will.
Shut this down now, for I have no cheek Left to turn. Stop the presses and leave the oil can empty. Turn the wick downside, then atrophy the dream. If I had known I’d inhale this deep and not want to let it go. If I had known that wall could never be chipped.
If I had known it’s all wrapped and dipped in indifference.
"If I had known"leaves me breathless...really,such a powerful write, nice work as usual
Reviewed by Patrick Granfors
Reviewed on June 14, 2009
You really are a cynic! My wife tells me that I have the same problem. Not sure it is a problem though. I love the poem. Even cynics have a good day. I hope you have one soon. Patrick
WOW I found this deep
I think this is one of those poems that has different meaning
to everyone who reads it, depending on what is happening in their lives
For me, I feel this way on days when I have been beaten down by life
Wonderfully written, I enjoyed it
Have a great day
Ray { The Buzzard }
I have days where I can certainly sympathize with the sentiment here. The first two lines of this are really good; I love the rhythm of the lines. I do think the inconsistent and often incorrect punctuation takes away from the reading experience. The last line is a nice ending for the poem. Good job.
Hi K, Nearly everyone can say, "If I had known"... it's the big IF that we find ourselves living by, only to find that IF never really happens. I sense exhaustion in this write, because I've felt the same way. But I know that it's easy for me to say, If I'd known this or that, I wouldn't have".. but when it comes right down to it, I know that's what I'd like to think I'd do, but coming right down to it, don't know if I would or could change anything. Great write that causes such deep thoughts... thank you for sharing...
Glad you're back. Appreciate your support. Well, a million more to go. We all best get started. I like when life is uphill because downhill usually ends up a bummer. It doesn't sound like you've been having too much fun. Excellent. Liz
Still Living on my Feet is the follow up to Tichaona Chinyelu’s first book, In the Whirlwind, which was rooted in a sense of hard-hitting revolutionary black love. However, in this sophomore effort, Tichaona brings the revolutionary essence from deep
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I think this is one of those poems that has different meaning
to everyone who reads it, depending on what is happening in their lives
For me, I feel this way on days when I have been beaten down by life
Wonderfully written, I enjoyed it
Have a great day
Ray { The Buzzard }
Peace be with you
William
In Spirit,
Bear
I have enjoyed the reading of "A Million Miles for Nothing".
Thank You for adding value to The American Fine Letters.
In admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
cuts to the chase,and satisfies the reader! Welcome back!;-)
ET
Be always safe,
Karen
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(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.