I love so many things about this... the quietness, the gentleness, the softly swaying cadence... and the shape! It all just softly melts together to carry your message to the heart.
Ahh...the dance of lovers is what you yearn. Love this poem and it's imagery of being swayed by the chaos looking for the orderly. Which way would I want it to be tonight. Liz
I love everything about this beautiful poem, Axilea.
First: the shape, like a harp, or a sail, or a satin scarf swayed by a breeze-- it says: I am an instrument, play me.
Second: Again, the color-- Red meeting a touch of blue, and creating a harmony-- but it also connotes a gentle inner strength, and oxygen-rich blood. ALIVE-- so now you are both vibrating, and vibrant.
Third: As Scott says, those harmonious consonant and vowels-- omoioteleton at its finest. At first, with the "K" sounds (like a chord), and then with the "w" and the "s" and vowel sounds we got movement-- the melody playing, the chords strummed slowly and melodically. Thus, we hear the music spoken of.
Fourth: The visuals and the word plays: The dancing, the silk, the color... and all those k-m combos working together. Thus we feel the harmony.
You create a palpable atmosphere that is moving, and spiritually uplifting. I think this is one of your best. I love it. --Charlie :)
There is a gentleness in your words here that is difficult to pinpoint, but most certainly permeates the work. Your message here that the two parties are needful of each other for completeness is expressed almost subliminally; 'through karma touched', 'drops reunite', "harmonious', 'handwoven', 'live..to be touched'. What struck me most, however, was your brilliant usage of alliteration. Excellent!
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First: the shape, like a harp, or a sail, or a satin scarf swayed by a breeze-- it says: I am an instrument, play me.
Second: Again, the color-- Red meeting a touch of blue, and creating a harmony-- but it also connotes a gentle inner strength, and oxygen-rich blood. ALIVE-- so now you are both vibrating, and vibrant.
Third: As Scott says, those harmonious consonant and vowels-- omoioteleton at its finest. At first, with the "K" sounds (like a chord), and then with the "w" and the "s" and vowel sounds we got movement-- the melody playing, the chords strummed slowly and melodically. Thus, we hear the music spoken of.
Fourth: The visuals and the word plays: The dancing, the silk, the color... and all those k-m combos working together. Thus we feel the harmony.
You create a palpable atmosphere that is moving, and spiritually uplifting. I think this is one of your best. I love it. --Charlie :)
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Fasciating. . .
Moving. . .
Dances right along and then tenderly ends.