A church
and a garden
a brush
and chalky gravel
My calligraphy -
the light in my darkness
black ink on the stone's whiteness -
A graveyard
in the smooth wind
the quiet beauty
of globe amaranths
My elements -
water from the shell-shaped fountain
silky lotus skin unsullied by mud -
When words combine
I can see clearly - crystal clear
through the blur and blood,
clearer than you, my friend,
but what's the use for you?
Your writing mixes up
your elements poisoned yew,
yet you will stand up
[only to be]
petrified by toxic certainties.
Great build and very strong concluding lines that really pack a punch, Axilea. Very unique and conceptually strong with some beautiful contrasting imagery and thoughts. In admiration, Kate xx
Axilea - Interesting contrast of people and monuments to them. I picture the serenity of the fountain eternally alive and the pride of the standing monument worn away by time. The imagery is profound. - David
This is a nice work...fitting the elements of comparison into a word process of demonstrative purpose and yet from within the stone there is the reality of difference even between stones...
Striking images although they seem to be blurred now and then by a fog or haze as if in a dream like spell. Enjoyed this one my friend and the passion it captures for your feelings.
hugs
fee
i really like the way you indent personal admissions in this piece. there is something about the way you have presented them that make them feel hushed... like whispered confessions almost.
I took a yew bow up,
and shot an arrow...
so sure of the aim was I,
that I had no need to look back--
to see its shaft poking out the middle
of the paper circles...
But she...
looking out of her bloody eyes
saw the shaft
and the circles
spreading out to infinity,
muddying what once was crystal-clear.
Perhaps "..Quiet Storm" will help rekindle old flames buried and long forgotten or express the love so deeply locked inside of your soul longing to be released.
Regardless of where you may be found in love this beautiful masterpiece can be
Using Calgary as a backdrop the author satirizes the self-serving nature of the public as it continues to fatten itself, not only physically, but egotistically as well.
Cryssa
very nice Axilea...
hugs
fee
Georg
your use of contrast is very effective.
well done Axilea...
John
I love the immediacy!
Love, Suzie :-D
and shot an arrow...
so sure of the aim was I,
that I had no need to look back--
to see its shaft poking out the middle
of the paper circles...
But she...
looking out of her bloody eyes
saw the shaft
and the circles
spreading out to infinity,
muddying what once was crystal-clear.
--Charlie