In her dream
she walks slowly
down the grey stairs
and the light goes off
so she listens
to her sleepy conscience
that enhances the sound
of darkness.
Spiraling movements
remembered as a refreshing shower
of liquid memories -
pale fingers on the handrail
a beige coat that flutters
like a flag sucked
in the dark void center -
she walks slowly
then she stops.
Time switch
clockwork memory
heartbeat awakening
through a dream
from the cold silence
of the staircase:
hissing pipes
buzzing cables
reminders of a stale world
against her warm breath.
She reaches for the light switch
to bring back the electric soul
artificial clarity
now only used
to free those ghosts
those toys locked in a cell.
Frozen moments end
when the spell of darkness is over
with the echo of her laughter lingering in the staircase
when her eyes are open wide
and in ash blond morning conscience
she’s awakened
to her life.
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Reviews of "Clockwork memory"
Reviewed by Carvin Wallson (Reader)
Reviewed on January 14, 2010
Good meditation on the different states of sleep. Very good use of language.
Axilea,
Transition between worlds of dream, sleep and consciousness well captured and expressed, word choice so effective and right, and the handrail and staircase images particularly rich in the context and theme.
John
Loved the description of those frozen moments which make up our dreams...transitioning to that moment of waking.
Cryssa
Reviewed by Gianetta Ellis (Reader)
Reviewed on May 8, 2009
Your transitions through impeccable word choices between each stanza are brilliant; the way you've constructed this piece gives it wonderful flow not only in sound, but in the unfolding meaning. The third stanza is like a wake-up call that fits beautifully, yet effectively jolts the reader from the preceding stupor toward an awakening.
This is wonderful indeed as it captures the hopes and dreams that were once abandoned and shines new light on them. good to see you back posting.
hugs
fee
Awakening to life again, what we all do in the morning. A dream is the most frightening thing sometimes. I do dream lots of weired dreams. This poetry fascinates me, no truer words can be said like you say them here. Putting them into perspective is just the way you did it. Thanks for the neat writing.
I like the alliteration of the last stanza--a full resolution back to reality and calm mind. --Charlie
Ron
Be always safe,
Karen
Transition between worlds of dream, sleep and consciousness well captured and expressed, word choice so effective and right, and the handrail and staircase images particularly rich in the context and theme.
John
Cryssa
hugs
fee
Much peace, love, and light,
Amber "V"