Time is raining, pouring,
no tank to store it.
arid soil.
a dry soul. dying gracefully -
it’s killing him.
him, eyes like infrared cameras
searching for warmth
maybe in the wrong places
heavy downpour of minutes
gusts of tears in self-disgust
ticking clock missing heartbeat
breath withheld: a red fish moment
asphyxiating in a snow globe
time is raining through his fingers
nothing filtered, nothing kept
water running on the surface
impermeable to streams of love
feeling unwanted, a body in a landfill
just a passing cloud
just a passing cloud
in one sunny afternoon
and he
would fall asleep
head on dusty mustard couch
(brackets) : dreams, a cuddling space
strings in the winds
whispers of vespers
when all else has disappeared
in-between and under blankets
temporary blindness just to dream
dream
(…)
a taxidermist’s house in the fog
a fox, once stuffed, is now running free
profane space turns into sacred grove
here, a lucus in the eye of the forest
near the bridge, at the waterfall
where it’s raining upwards, to the sky
to the sky
a word, a prayer
blurry worries evaporate
from eyelids that painfully open
to a world that’s crystal clear
and he
awakens to faith
to time’s passing
quenching thirst
from endless sources.
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Reviews of "It was killing him"
Reviewed by Diana Legun (Reader)
Reviewed on July 3, 2012
"...raining upwards, to the sky" one of your many abstract visions that, evidenced from comments on your variety of work, enthrall those who read them. This palette from which you paint has colors you have mixed that are not seen on many canvases. Transfixing to look at them. Thank you. ~~ DIana
I see myself in each of your lines. The desolation, sadness and hope. You have somehow managed to write a self-guiding in depth look for each of us to follow. From every part of my heart and soul I "thank you!" for the strength of your words and the wisdom that you impart. God bless you.
My eyes too have been opened to this emotional piece of art so beautifully painted by such a talented soul. Thanks for the insight and depth of this brilliant work. Thanks again Axilea.
feeling unwanted, a body in a landfill
just a passing cloud
just a passing cloud
in one sunny afternoon
... how we can feel that acute passivity and emptiness of this! And yet the hope in your concluding lines - where does it come from? The force that set the stuffed fox free? Love the surprise in this. As always, your words intrigue and entrance. xx
Reviewed by Sandy Hoynacki (Reader)
Reviewed on November 14, 2011
Love the way you write with intrigue always blending with descriptive metaphorical images dancing in and out of every line.....
Amazing how you write of paradoxes and have such power of awareness!
I so love "a fox, once stuffed, is now running free / profane space turns into sacred grove".
Blessings,
Christine
the search is life long Axilea -- we are constantly seeking, evaluating, always in want of the who, what, when, where, how and why of it -- answers come in jigsaw puzzled pieces taking a lifetime, if we are fortunate, to assemble and then, interpretation is a trickster! -- the game of life requires a resolute appreciation and acceptance that the quizzical will always exceed the answers -- I bid you joy, love and peace my dear friend -- Jon Michael
I especially like how you wraped [circled]it up to a completion,i wonder if this is a snapshot of everyman, or perhaps I'm just seeing to much of myself in "him"....bravo Axilea
'was' in the title; 'is' in the body.
he has put it behind him and has emerged
new, but that it is the nub - the life
that was disappointment, incompleteness,
restlessness of spirit...finding ourselves
is the ultimate challenge.
Axilea...yes!
Excellent - like your asking the reader questions and then you guide them to the answer.
db
Reviewed by D. Vegas (Reader)
Reviewed on November 9, 2011
WoW!! Axilea!! Your poem is like an elusive butterfly!!
Always,
Deborah
Reviewed by RWE SAYS BYE (Reader)
Reviewed on November 9, 2011
this could be the minutia endemic to so many, this concatenated imagery, so vivid so clear, these fallen leaves, so rich to the ear, these dying embers whose crackles we hear as the campfire light under starlight disappears. Your poetry as usual, Axilea is evocative and splendid, and as always, too close to home, I fear. Looking forward to upcoming finery. You wear it so well.
cuddling space called dreams...
beautifully expressed, poetess!
peace,
carolyn
dan
just a passing cloud
just a passing cloud
in one sunny afternoon
... how we can feel that acute passivity and emptiness of this! And yet the hope in your concluding lines - where does it come from? The force that set the stuffed fox free? Love the surprise in this. As always, your words intrigue and entrance. xx
I so love "a fox, once stuffed, is now running free / profane space turns into sacred grove".
Blessings,
Christine
"ticking clock missing heartbeat
breath withheld: a red fish moment
asphyxiating in a snow globe"
powerful impact ...
he has put it behind him and has emerged
new, but that it is the nub - the life
that was disappointment, incompleteness,
restlessness of spirit...finding ourselves
is the ultimate challenge.
Axilea...yes!
John
db
Always,
Deborah