hot july fourth night (poem) by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner on AuthorsDen

Reviewed on July 5, 2003

A very good first effort. The imagery is strong, the vision tight, and focused. I enjoyed it. There's a "Teach Yourself" book on writing Erotica that might interest you. It's by Mike Bailey, released through NTC Publishing Group. I've found it very helpful myself. You might like to check it out.

Reviewed by Maria Lupinacci

Reviewed on July 2, 2003

Karla,
The form and content are excellent in this!
This is being marked as one of my favorites by you, so soft and sensual, yet filled with the fun of romance and love also!

Hugs,
Maria

Reviewed by Abdi-Noor Mohamed (Eagle Of Hope)

Reviewed on July 2, 2003

Inside everybody
this poem ignites a fuse.
wonderful write, karla
abdinoor

Reviewed by m w

Reviewed on July 2, 2003

:) Karla, make it so - I will be thinking of this piece as the fireworks burst overhead on the 4th

Reviewed by Trish - The Trickster

Reviewed on July 2, 2003

Wonderful toasty write. :)

Reviewed by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie

Reviewed on July 2, 2003

This was wonderful, That was some 4th of July! I loved it!

Reindeer

Reviewed by Handsum Hart

Reviewed on July 1, 2003

nice work

Reviewed by Bianca Boonstra (Reader)

Reviewed on July 1, 2003

Hot write about a hot night :-) I hope it doesn't rain on the 4th

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes

Reviewed on July 1, 2003

hey I like this...was your feet cold??
take care....:)))

Love
Tinka

Reviewed by tiffany

Reviewed on July 1, 2003

it's not bad for a first attempt.

Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader)

Reviewed on July 1, 2003

Karla this is wonderful, softly sensual but hot.

Reviewed by Donna Maris

Reviewed on July 1, 2003

Whewwwhooo..Finally- we have ignition and LIFT OFF!! =) EXCELLENT!..Im glad you were inspired to write from reading my work..=)
now you know why Belle calls me SpiceGirl =)
sure you don't have red hot jeans, too? Donna

Reviewed by - - - - - TRASK

Reviewed on July 1, 2003

7-01-03

Most Interestingly so Hot!

TRASK

Reviewed by E T Waldron

Reviewed on July 1, 2003

WOW WOW!Karla, how beautiful! you surprised me with the fancy fireworks;-)A really sweet touching poem with exciting finale!

Reviewed by No Longer Member (Reader)

Reviewed on July 1, 2003

Here's to the "up coming" holiday.......this poem rocks too.

Reviewed by Jenni Kalicharan

Reviewed on July 1, 2003

Wow!! Great write.. You should write more..
Happy 4th of July!! *wink*
Jenni

Reviewed by Robert Blackwell (Reader)

Reviewed on July 1, 2003

Mmmmmmmboy! Loved this bit of erotica.

Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado

Reviewed on July 1, 2003

wow! not bad for a first attempt; this is great! could see the fireworks goin' off in my mind as i read this passion-filled write! gret job! (((HUGS))) and love, your twin, karen lynn. :)