Please help: Should the title be 'In Silence' or as is?
As he lay dying
She stroked his hair
In silence
After he trembled and
Breathed one final time
She took his thin hands,
Still warm,
And folded them across his stomach
In silence
The way she left the room
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Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on June 9, 2007
I found a man/neighbour on the floor dying,nothing in his eyes, no reponse I dived through his window, kept his airwaves free. Cut a long story short, he was expected to die that night, but by Gods Grace I got there in time to give primary aid and the paramedics and NHS are just brilliant...He's now off life support, thinks everyones in his home..lol But I've seen the old feller and by the grace of God he will be fine... And of course living here we get all our medical care free....
An excellent and moving write my friend...I like the title you have, it allows the reader to ponder the questions...How do you spell love, what is love, or how do we measure love? While your poem solves the mystery and questions with an unexpected answer! Enjoyed my friend, leave it as!
Blessings,
Joyce B.
This is a great story poem. I wouldn't use the title "In Silence" because it is used alot in the poem and might be too obvious of a title. That's just me though. Anyway, really liked this one.
Randall,
Exceptional poetry. In silence she left the room, but inside she was in turmoil. She had lost her best friend, companion, the love of her life. So much can be read between the lines in this excellent write.
First Edition Translation of Teselas by Carmen Crespo X111 César Simón Poetry Prixe 2016 Translated from Spanish by Robin Ouzman Hislop and Amparo Arrospíde
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Well Timed poem..
Chrissy
Blessings,
Joyce B.
Excellence; well done!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Brett
Love,
Susan
Exceptional poetry. In silence she left the room, but inside she was in turmoil. She had lost her best friend, companion, the love of her life. So much can be read between the lines in this excellent write.
Many blessings,
~Linda