feet wet from our cresting reverie long after we walked out of the water
our two sets of toes buried in fickle sand and a tide's slow rising
it casted our far souls alight when receding yet it resembled
half moons closing in your eyes where skies once edged out the stars
though men worked, bare-backed, i sang and you played guitar
and our song made the leaves chuckle and applaud with a fury
one reckless and strange for trees so silent before our coming
yet they bowed their full heads to the parade of our words
some told me to stay so very still when my heart was free
it always was and is and i stayed and I wept for you
wept like the call of the crow in the farthest off night
a cacophony of shadow notes left on stilts in the mud
i thought i should go but i didnt and stayed calling you
till my skin and my voice had grown hoarse with the whispering
i remained naked embedded on the sea bed of new dawnings
yet my seaweed hair twisted deep in this absence of breathing.
hugs
Fee
Alexandra*
half moons closing in your eyes where skies once edged out the stars
a cacophony of shadow notes left on stilts in the mud
yet my seaweed hair twisted deep in this absence of breathing.
... last lines, funnily enough! Just wondering about all the enjambements and repetition in the penultimate line, though... otherwise the flow is dreamy. TY Kate xx
lOVE tINKA
John
Regis xo
I agree with Karla, keep painting your verses, you are a brilliant poet. Excellent poetry , my friend.
Many blessings,
~Linda
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.