“This will be a sign to you: you shall find a baby wrapped in cloths and lying in a manger.” ~ Luke 2:12
Morning rush hour – on the side of the road: the burned-out shell of a car. All that’s left
is blackened metal, crumpled and twisted like a wad of paper tossed aside and forgotten.
From my car, which moves like a snail in a creeping line of snails, I see pink cloth fluttering.
My wonder that color has survived turns to horror as I realize it is a cloth for swaddling, tattered now, melded to what is left of an inverted car seat.
I want to know what became of the child, an innocent hurled too soon into a world of danger.
A wordless cry finds its voice within me; a question begets another question and, still, I’m stuck in traffic.
Through tumbling tears I know: I must look this season for the missing child in the eyes of the child I find.
i was able to visualize this scene quite vividly ... the images and direction you took me in totally captured my attention ... brilliant in perspective and delivery ...
Reviewed by Joseph* OneLight*® (Reader)
Reviewed on December 16, 2005
Blessings are laid at the feet of compassionate hearts.
Good tension built throughout -- it gave the impression the driver would get out of the car and go look, but the ending was very poignant. Good work, Dawn.
Great build up and fantastic turn at the end, Dawn. Very powerful and compelling; gut-gripping in the extreme and yet you manage to transcend and provide the escape hatch. Brilliantly conceived and written. Thank you, Kate xx
Sad and profound, Dawn, this poem tugs at the heart and bruises the soul. You cast a ray of hope in the end reminding us that no one really leaves us and that their reflection will be delivered to us in another form.
Take care,
Sherry
First Edition Translation of Teselas by Carmen Crespo X111 César Simón Poetry Prixe 2016 Translated from Spanish by Robin Ouzman Hislop and Amparo Arrospíde
Inspirational poetry, written from the heart and soul. Verses that are well-suited for reading on a rainy day and that are guaranteed to bring a smile to your face.
Love & Light,
Joseph
Carmen :-)
Keep searching--you'll find it. An apropos message for modern times - thank you!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Merry Christmas!
Take care,
Sherry
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Love,
Eileen