Like this slightly teeth-knashing, onomatopoeic (??) spitter-spatter, natter-mutter.... Only much better!! Thank you for getting it out and down on the page... Have your ever done spontaneous writing... where you keep your pen pressed continuously to the page for a few minutes and write just one long stream of consciousness, any words that come into your head?? Apparently, THAT's really therapeutic... AND throws up some interesting and previously unknown thoughts... Reckon you hotdammed slamdunked this one! :)) Kate xx

the alliteration accentuates the frustration in this unusual poem ... the hip-hop style gives it a sense of being on the edge ...

Angry? Frustrated maybe? Got it out? Feel better?

Be safe,
Karen

Well done!!

Love Tinka

Gret job of alliteration! I read it several times because it is so intriguing. Chopping away of the self. Something I can certainly relate to.

Carmen :-)

Hey girl, if it works, go to it.

Fun...

I don't think you could have gotten rid of any more agression if you had taken something outside and smashed it to smithereens, Dawn. What a great "work it out" poem you have given us. Not your usual offering, but a good one, none the less.
Take care,
Sherry

Dawn,

Sometimes, you just gotta write. You do, cleverly. Or should I say, cleaver-ly? *sorry couldn't resist* Seriously: I enjoyed, especially since this doesn't reflect how life is for you. Well done!

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.