She let go and let it come…
her indecisiveness torn to shreds.
In the echo of the hollow footfalls
dignity began to loom.
Past the corridors of yearning
she shuffled feet to a distant humming.
In her hand a shining object,
reflecting brilliant prisms of hope
awaiting somewhere...
farther down the line.
Her steps grew quicker
as the illusions began to run like watercolors.
The last of teardrops shimmered softly
upon her cheeks as she progressed,
softly dried by winds of change.
Then as the last of shadows swam
beneath her lids,
she found the door…
and from her hand she placed the key
inside the lock.
Aware that there will always be the past,
she opened wide
the future’s door…
to find her soul.
Now most of you know I always write in rhyme...so please let me know what you think of my freeverse. :)
I like the free verse very much. I think that you've done a great job here. I guess, I am the opposite, I write in end-rhyme very little these days though in the beginning that's all that I did. (other than internal rhyme, which I do love) Anyway, I think it's good.
Love, JC xoxoxoxo
Reviewed by Ed Lupinacci (Reader)
Reviewed on December 2, 2002
True beauty of thought comes out in the images created on the page. and wether this rhymed or not the beauty and style are a gift to the reader
Reviewed by Steve Reichard (Reader)
Reviewed on December 1, 2002
Fantastic poem! and I really enjoyed reading it.
Steve
Reviewed by Katy Walsvik (Reader)
Reviewed on November 14, 2002
your transition to free verse is as smooth as your deliver of thought.. this is simply wonderful! katy.
Hey Sis! It's really very strange.....because I too have been playing around with free verse...My heart will always remain with the flow of rhyme but I enjoy free. This is fantastic....above all you are a poet..the form doesn't matter for your words are always perfect. Ty, Dani
Reviewed by Cathy Montgomery (Reader)
Reviewed on November 11, 2002
I love this, Melissa, and I agree with what everyone said here, and especially, with Eileen...
Reviewed by Tim Horton (Reader)
Reviewed on November 11, 2002
I liked this one! Nowadays I write mostly in freeverse. There's no restriction, and the words flow so much easier. Great write!
Cheers,
Tim
Reviewed by Sally Montoye (Reader)
Reviewed on November 11, 2002
The message of your words is loud and clear. That's all that counts in my book. I like!!!
Reviewed by na na (Reader)
Reviewed on November 11, 2002
I see hon that you are developing quite a following here (and deservedly so). You are masterful in your ability to rhyme with the same wonderful quality that keeps you a step higher than the other poets. Your talent prevails. I will have our song posted here as quick as I can. Sandie Angel has been helping me to get them on this site. please check out my tonight's post of a song titled: "Linda" my heart is broken but I will rebound quickly. I feel that pretty soon my songs will start getting picked up. keep your fingers crossed. Your good friend and hopefully someday we will write together again. Bill
As on your last post I said you already have it in hand Melissa, I don't think you would have a problem with any style,you have a true poetic soul;-)this write is excellent in all ways...
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on November 10, 2002
wonderful that you have tried another style and you have done really well with it. I feel a gentle flow all the way through and your words had great timing. Keep up the good writing. I like this one :-)
I think you already have a sense of how much freeverse allows you the freedom of expression without the confines of rhyme and pattern. We already know you are a master in writing rhyme and meter but it is awesome who you have expanded so readily to the world of freeverse as well. Never give up on any style developed within your arsenal...but always expand that universe of expression as much as you can in every form that you can. There is no doubt you have the ability to master them all.
Amor
Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson (Reader)
Reviewed on November 10, 2002
I love it, someone on another site
mentioned that I rhyme too much and that I should experiment with freeverse....
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I like the free verse very much. I think that you've done a great job here. I guess, I am the opposite, I write in end-rhyme very little these days though in the beginning that's all that I did. (other than internal rhyme, which I do love) Anyway, I think it's good.
Love, JC xoxoxoxo
Steve
Hey Sis! It's really very strange.....because I too have been playing around with free verse...My heart will always remain with the flow of rhyme but I enjoy free. This is fantastic....above all you are a poet..the form doesn't matter for your words are always perfect. Ty, Dani
Cheers,
Tim
Amor
mentioned that I rhyme too much and that I should experiment with freeverse....