I read this from work and couldn't comment...you changed the last stanza, but it is actually tighter and more poignant this way. Not to say the original didn't work, just that ending it with "ellipses" really "shows" the meaning. Very tight and concise!
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The poems in this beautifully bound book are a result of over twenty years of observations. Observations of the world around us and on the telecommunications network. All of the hate, love, heroism, disasters, and those who help.
Beautif
cleverly penned, Tracie ...
I read this from work and couldn't comment...you changed the last stanza, but it is actually tighter and more poignant this way. Not to say the original didn't work, just that ending it with "ellipses" really "shows" the meaning. Very tight and concise!
Elizabeth
Oh body language to me is a dead givaway!!
Love Tinka
Michael