It’s okay, the man said. It’s okay, little miss. Living doll, know that? Here, let me help you. See that big, fat, shiny grape way up high? Give me your hand and I will help you reach. . .there you go. You are going to love the taste. Just like sugar. Don’t worry, it isn’t dirty. Here, put it in your mouth. Good, isn’t it? Let’s pick some more from that bunch that is right over your pretty little head. See? Eyes so big. Hair so soft. Let me touch it one more time. There, there. . . . Later, she touched a purple spot at the top of her leg. The first of several beginning with twisted offers dangled by men who wanted to help. All had something she needed to give. Something very good, she should be grateful. The fruit the grape man dangled was in a clump that hung from crisscrossed strips of unpainted wood over her 5-year-old head. Bumps on the path he made tripped, and a splinter dug real deep. Later, the sun burned through. Burned spots into her eyes, but she saw dirt hair clung to the blubber back of his neck. Teeth had gaped when she clambered over the fence, starving for something, or someone, sweet. She had followed her nose because she wanted to know what an arbor looked like. Bunch of twisted vines. No thorns, but you bleed.
You have a way of drawing the reader into the plot so to allow him/her to expirience the deceit, the shift from joy to pain and in the end leave us in awe -- utterly speechless. Great piece of work, Pea.
Awe, now this one tears my heart out...such a sad feeling about this write. I, as the other have read, and read again. A sad write that is all too often true for many children across this land!
Blessings,
Joyce Bowling
Sad but powerfully true and I agree with others, this one is to be read and reread for the obvious methaphor may not be what you the artist propose. Pain and sadness seem to be prevailant but so is desire to be accepted even if it is not right. Very good Pea
have re-read this several times
and the feeling of a sadness and pain
Keeps coming through,
So I will do as...Reg
I will read over wanting to be "sure"
Well expressed and very powerful message!!
Love And Peace To You Always
Your Friend....Morning Star
The imagery in this is so explicit, unwashed metaphor is so powerful the grapes shrivel to not make them so attractive and eye-catching, say sour grapes, cuz they are, ya know...love you, Pea...
An interesting write, a sensual write, yet a very sad, depressing, hurtful write. Did enjoy reading this, but soemwhere there is a hidden message. Thank you.
This is certainly worthy of much more than a single reading, Pea. I think I know that of which it expresses but, wanting to be "sure" if I can, I must read again and... ...again. Powerful and engaging write. Thank you for sharing it. Love and peace,
Gemma succeeds in starting a girls' football team at her new school, but bitter rival Tyrone does everything he can to stop the girls playing. So begins a battle of wits between the girls and boys, and also between Gemma and sports teacher, Mrs Lawfo
This second book in Edie's 'Puddle' series is filled with wonderful catchy rhyming poems that have positive nostalgic messages. Her whimsical illustrations carry the poems along on ripples of warm vibrant colours.
Carmen
Blessings,
Joyce Bowling
Fee
Love Tinka
Unique and intriguing... "Twisted Tendrils" makes one think. It is one that demands more than one reading.
I salute You, Poet.
In admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
and the feeling of a sadness and pain
Keeps coming through,
So I will do as...Reg
I will read over wanting to be "sure"
Well expressed and very powerful message!!
Love And Peace To You Always
Your Friend....Morning Star
Sage
Be safe,
Karen
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :( >tears! <
Regis
This one hurts. Lingering pain in heartbreaking lines...very powerfully penned sadness. Well done.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla. :(