I die a death that all panthers die
an inordinate connection to a grave
a slave of the soil in summer’s wind
when the rave of spring is sprung
to rescind lost tears in winter’s beak
to speak of a body long gone cold
when the bones rave old and brittle
then with little time left to grieve
bereft and stilled in autumn's hold
The tongue has withered in silence
muted now are my songs once sung
for the cells of memory fade to black
and the last mourner will not be back
It is now too late to chant that spell
that resurrects an image by a dream
the recollection of sequence will tell
Long out of range and left in the rain
the pain of living seems now strange
out of order in the looking glass
out of focus is the relic of the past
when yester youth would draw a breath
taken for granted to the hour of death
and I, from life, have subtracted fate
a diminished rest I have found too late
I've missed your work too. This piece takes me back to the smoke filled coffee houses where poets smelled of coffee and tobacco and where the best applause was a nod and a grunt. This is very nostalgic for me. Best stop! I'm showing my age. Wonderful poem Amor!
Susan
Amor,your work is always outstanding, this is no exception. However I'm worried by the tone? I hope all is well!I'll keep you in thought and prayer!May the Panther always lurk;-)!
This is beautiful, Amor...but meloncholy, compared to your other works. Makes one reflect on their mortality. Been doing that myself lately. Wish I would get over it, too.
Love to you and yours.
Amor, I believe in constructive comments and thus is mine:
the first portion of three had me so enthralled, wanting more, wanting to follow you down into the soil and die as you have...yet as the poem evolves I find that I became lost in the rhyme of it. As if you spent too much time trying to rhyme, therefore losing the essence of that grand beginning. Yet, I still enjoyed the poem and so did the friends I read it aloud to. Thanks.
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on June 22, 2004
Touches deeply. GREAT write. Nice to see you back :-)
Reviewed by Ed Lupinacci (Reader)
Reviewed on June 22, 2004
To rhyme or not to rhyme
that is the question
whether tis nobler or not
matters not for this
equisite write
Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader)
Reviewed on June 22, 2004
Amor this is a masterpiece, could feel every word deep in my soul. I miss you, Dear Friend.
Robin Ouzman Hislop's poetry is certainly in dialogue with some of the key architects of the 'poetics of indeterminacy' – both the Modernist strands represented by the likes of Beckett and Stein, and the postmodernist strands represented, initially,
This collection of poetry addresses the nature of time, reflections on the natural world, the difficulty of loss,
contemporary social issues and gratitude for life.
Excellent write.
Reindeer
I've missed your work too. This piece takes me back to the smoke filled coffee houses where poets smelled of coffee and tobacco and where the best applause was a nod and a grunt. This is very nostalgic for me. Best stop! I'm showing my age. Wonderful poem Amor!
Susan
Love to you and yours.
Elizabeth
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in tx., karen lynn. :(
intense and sorrowful..
excellent ending amor........pax......A
Love Tinka
painful, expressive write you've penned--welcome back...i've missed you
(((HUGS))) and love, karla. :)
the first portion of three had me so enthralled, wanting more, wanting to follow you down into the soil and die as you have...yet as the poem evolves I find that I became lost in the rhyme of it. As if you spent too much time trying to rhyme, therefore losing the essence of that grand beginning. Yet, I still enjoyed the poem and so did the friends I read it aloud to. Thanks.
that is the question
whether tis nobler or not
matters not for this
equisite write